When Time's parched tounge spells the word ______
understand that life's love is quenched
When hours come and seconds slow by dawn's light
withdrawing mind into sight's flight
When hate consumes the fire of heart's beating bowels
remember the woman's warmth whose love did shower
When all is come and lost is gone and parted
"can you use it in a sentence please?"....asked Time
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EXCELLENT
When hours come and seconds slow by dawn's light
withdrawing mind into sight's flight
great write
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A rather unique write. I enjoyed the imagery this created in my mind. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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What an intriguing poem you have penned here...encased in sadness. Bravo!
Mariana
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A curious and most intriguing piece here, arcane and a tad esoteric... interesting phraseology, "heart's beating bowels..", "When all is come and lost is gone.."
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I had to stop and do some thinking on this write.You expressed what you were wanting to say quite well but for me it had more then just a passing thought or expression of feeling.Great job.I like the title you gave this it catches the readers eye and keeps you wanting to read more.
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Powerful!
Very powerful, this kept me reading it over and over! until it sank in...I loved how dramatic this poem is; in such a short but powerful way.
I really liked it.
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I get a mix of sadness , darkness yet also hope and I just really do like this a great deal. Good work!
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