You look at me
but never see me
You hear me
but never listen
The only thing
you feel from me
are my lips giving
you pleasure
So in a glass of pain
i serve you
Your admiration
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ART BY Heile#7
A contest entry
- Art by Heile #7 by Tattboyspet.
475 points, ended June 6, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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TAI
When all life seems to give you are lemons, make lemonade. I hope that is lemonade!
Also conspicuously absent are her feet and legs with which she might make her exit from this apparently distasteful set of circumstances.
You did good though.
Sorry not to read more. When I don't know exactly what to read I go through titles.
I think you are right when you said you like to use as few words as is diligently necessary to get a thought across. From what I've read thus far you are not new to that regimen.
Quite good!
John
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'So in a glass of pain
i serve you
Your admiration' ... A-FREAKING-MAZING! The imagery in that just plain rocks and that was definitely my favorite part. Though the picture does creep me out a bit, I like how you made the picture of lips in a glass work so well.
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taiinfinite
thanks for your comment and time to read this
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'So in a glass of pain i serve you' - excellent imagery!
thank you for your entry
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taiinfinite
thanks for running the contest, always have good challenging pics
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