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I Belong In Your Song

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Could i have stopped time?


I want to freeze that moment
when your eyes met mine
in a lover's embrace.

Two souls melted
as one
playing a melody
of their own.

First time to be loved
in tenderness desire
your fire heats to excitement
but never burns my heart.

Sweet sweat dripped
from your hair
as we gave to each other

in free wills abandon
finally ache of love, forfilled

Could I have stopped time?


The moment you touched me
till the last tremble
underneath you.

I still tingle every-time
you look at me
Time...  
doesn't exist in paradise.

I need you again and again
For your love
takes me to a place i have
finally discovered.

Intoxicate by the way
you look at me.
Responding to each caress...


I belong in your song.

Author notes

To my Xianaria,I belong to you. Take me there.
"We love our crazymomma"

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  • PoeticLove
    October 7
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    I loved this...but never burns my heart.
    This was sensual and very classy.
    I loved this write.
    Bell, xx


  • Rovingone gold member
    September 10

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    Again, you capture the most universal of thoughts. Is there anyone who hasn't desired to stop time, and be forever in the moment of the greatest ecstasy? Yes, I know I have thought all these things, but didn't possess the expression you have for immortalizing them.


  • RestlessDreamer
    August 26

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    Very beautiful poem! I like how you chose to ask "Could I have stopped time?" instead of saying "I could have stopped time." It made me stop and think a little more about the words I was reading. Great job!!!
  • Durlon silver member
    August 26
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    well done

    Flows well. Good rhythm. Good imagery develops an intense emotion. Has the ring of sincerity.


  • sandybeaches gold member
    August 26

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    A beautiful expression of love for your special someone. Love it! When you find "that one"...it's magic! Pam

    . Rewarded 4


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    August 26
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    so luscious and tender is this poem!

    way to write and melt our hearts!
    BRAVO! BRAVO! BRAVO!
    ears/Seattle


  • Xianaria gold member
    August 26

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    you are in my song...this feature is just a lil way of showing i love you

    when i get home later, let's make some music

    gettin jiggy wit my girl
    ~tim

  • The Otep
    August 26
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    awww! This is sensual in such a beautiful way...greatness!!


  • whos my humblepie
    August 26

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    This is amazing and and beautiful.
    Such lovely feeling with deep emotion.
    I think you have a few innocent errors in typing/spelling in some places.

    •forfilled
    -don't remember where I saw the other

    . Rewarded 4


  • ScottishPrincess silver member
    August 26

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    Wow,what can I say?...this is absolutely beautiful indeed!....Truly a masterpiece and a pleasure to read,Hazel

    . Rewarded 4


  • Ms.Kitty
    August 26
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    I really like thsis one.

  • TheFlutterbyRuler
    August 26
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    great poem! love the title..very beautiful


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
    August 2

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    Congratulations on the trophies
    ... may you keep singing and being sung!

    Sol


  • GreenHrtPaleMoon gold member
    July 31

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    This. Was. Absolutely. GORGEOUS! I loved the hook line 'Could I have stopped time?" and its subsequent repetition. Wonderful imagery abound, this is DEF one of my favorite sensual reads on this site. (has stolen the picture btw)


  • CatQueen248
    July 29

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    I loved your poem so much. Like VeritasLiberte said it was sensual, but not dirty. This truly shows how much you love your husband. Again an amazing write. Only thing I saw wrong was the last stanza just change intoxicate to "intoxicate", it would sound better.

  • VeritasLiberte
    July 28

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    This is truly LOVELY and ATTRACTIVE sensuality! Nothing "dirty" or "smutty" here! I'm sure your husband appreciates this as your HEART'S CRY TO HIM! Great write!

    . Rewarded 4


    • xianariaslifetime gold member
      July 28
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      Thank you!

      I loved what you said,

      this as your HEART'S CRY TO HIM

      Yes, it is my heart and i do appreciate that you could see that!
      He's my lifetime, my world.
      Thanks again for reading and such a beautiful comment!

      Hugs
      ~Lisa~

  • Soulful Woman silver member
    July 28

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    This just took me away to places I have been. There are times where you just want time to stand still so that the moment doesn't end. To be a part of a lovers song is a beautiful place to be.
    Soulful Woman

    . Rewarded 4


    • xianariaslifetime gold member
      July 28
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      Soulful

      Yes, to be in a lover's song is the greatest of all experiances i so agree!
      To be one harmony together in a moment of time well, it is very hard to write how we feel at that time.
      Thank you for reading sweety!

      Hugs
      ~Lisa~

  • deadheartedkitty
    July 28

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    so romantic and the words just flow, and i love the pic at the beginning...and the first time is always the best...you seem to capture that aspect very well...a beautiful write thanks for shareing

    . Rewarded 4


    • xianariaslifetime gold member
      July 28
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      Thanks!

      It was my heart to my love, so thank you for reading and such a woonderful comment!

      Hugs
      ~Lisa~

  • Wolf Mancini
    July 28

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    Very beautiful

    The title seduced me, and the poem finished me.
    Very loving and tender moments you have weaved for us to feel on our own flesh...like silk, or satin.

    Excellent my friend..

    wolf

    . Rewarded 4


    • xianariaslifetime gold member
      July 28
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      Wolf

      Thank you very much! What a great comment!
      I weaved feeings? Well then i guess i did good!
      lol
      Thanks for saying it was excellent!
      A write for my sweet husband who i adore!

      Hugs
      ~Lisa~
  • ian sawicki silver member
    July 28

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    a good poem penned, in a lovers embrace. not taking away from your poem winning golds etc but if i were the judge i would say to you

    in a lovers embrace. - in a lover's embrace. as the embrace belongs to the lover so you would not have won in any of my contests

    • xianariaslifetime gold member
      July 28
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      individuality

      First thanks for reading!
      Also thanks for your advise i did change that little mistake.
      Now would i have won in any of you're contest? lol
      I love your honesty!
      When i write it just spills out, editing isn't my best subject, good thing if i ask my husband will help me!
      He is the editor in the family! lol
      I never was a perfectionist just love to write.

      Hugs
      ~Lisa~

  • cutter16
    July 28

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    oooh i have chills... very well written...my favorite lines were lines 25 an 26 "i still tingle everytime you look at me...i feel the exact same way about my girlfriend everytime she looks at me it sends chills up my spine!!

    • xianariaslifetime gold member
      July 28
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      Thanks!

      Yes! when you love someone i think the chills come so naturally!
      Thanks for reading!

      Hugs
      ~Lisa~

  • poetrychick2008
    July 28

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    Very expressing...

    i can see how that made you feel at your point of view...
    about the first time to be loved...
    i hope it is just like that...very over reaching!

    . Rewarded 4


    • xianariaslifetime gold member
      July 28
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      Thank you

      Thanks for being able to see my feelings. If a poet can make someone see or feel then i take that as a high compliment!

      Hugs
      ~Lisa~
  • profmes
    July 28

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    prof. mes/ rectifies/yer verse

    Could any person any goup
    Have stopped
    The time?
    (Who can't love this rhyme?)

    "I want to freeze that moment"
    When my eyes met with sun beams
    Reflecting from the foliage to embrace
    Our souls
    To be melted as one
    "Playing a melody" of antic "phone"!
    Of its own.

    Multi times to be loved
    "In tenderness desire"
    Your fire cools besides the sun of excitement
    But never to make frozen my heart.

    . Rewarded 8


    • xianariaslifetime gold member
      July 28
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      profmes

      First thank you for reading!
      I think i like your version better but i wrote this from my heart.
      Thanks leaving a great comment.

      Hugs
      ~Lisa~

  • ShannonLea
    July 28
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    Beautifully sensual.
    Conveys so much affection and love
    Great poem
    ~cheers

  • catie052 gold member
    July 27

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    oh this is just lovely...very sappy!!! lol. This is a great piece...I see why it won 2 golds!! congrats


    • xianariaslifetime gold member
      July 28
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      catie

      Awww, That was a very sweet comment.
      I think sappy is good sometimes. We need to show our love in many ways.
      Thanks for the comment!
      Hugs
      ~Lisa~

  • Woodchuck4400 silver member
    July 27

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    This is a great poem. It is a terrific compliment to your husband.

    Great job.

    Mike


  • Xianaria gold member
    July 27
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    you go girl! yay! i'll celebrate silver if you have the gold anyday woohoo!

  • xianariaslifetime gold member
    July 27
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    WOW!

    Again Thank you! I am very honored but most of all i am happy i ever had the chance to write this poem for the one person i feel deserves everything..my husband Tim!

    I am humbled
    s

  • crazymomma
    July 27

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    OMG! This is beautiful! I am speechless here. I really enjoyed the the line about time doesn't exist in paradise. I don't know what else to say except this is exquisite and amazing!

    • xianariaslifetime gold member
      July 27
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      Thank you Crazymomma!

      I know how you feel about your love! Once you find the one you just know. I am totally addicted cant get enough of Tim ! Hes my world! He has brought such love to me that there is no way to ever show him how much i appreciate him.

      Isn't being in love awesome!

      Hugs
      ~Lisa~
  • omgwtfkmart
    July 17

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    Wow

    This is really good, I desided to comment on one of your poems and I just closed my eyes and clicked because you have so many, then I would click on a sexxxy one lol. Jp jp. Lol Love it love you .


  • Angelflower Greeters member
    June 28

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    this was so beautiful.. full of wonderful passion and intense emotion.. I really liked the flow and imagery that was here as well... Thank you very much for sharing. I really enjoyed this.. best of luck..

    Angel

  • ennovy silver member
    June 22

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    beautifully penned full of passion....thanks for enteringnovy & Brazos
  • twodie4
    June 22
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    Breathtakingly beautiful
    td4


  • Brazos silver member
    June 22

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    Very sensual, very romantic. Time CAN stand still under the right circumstances.

    Thanks for entering, and good luck in the contest.

    Novy & Brazos

  • Xianaria gold member
    June 19
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    Congrats Baby!

    Hi Sweetie, congrats on the Gold! Wonderful job!

    Oh, and you're always in my song!

    I love you

    Tim

  • Poetryintheblood
    June 19
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    Thank you for your entry, good luck in my contest, Josie

    • xianariaslifetime gold member
      June 19
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      Joisie

      Wow! I am so thrilled! Yet very humbled right now.
      Thank you so much for holding this contest and allowing me the privilege of writing my heart.
      Thanks for the gold i am honored.

      Hugs
      ~Lisa~

  • Velvet Rose Petals
    June 8

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    After this poem I hope you are put into the song. Although you are probably already there in spirit although there are no words. Good luck with this. Amazing poem, good description of your love

  • aj.vamp
    June 8

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    Beautiful. It is such a touching and heartfelt poem.
    I am totally in love with it.
    The way you described everyything, it flowed so well.
    STill in love with it.

    . Rewarded 4


  • hesmineforever2008
    June 8
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    gorgous

    that was so amazing. you have great talent.

  • NurseyPoo
    June 8

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    Beautiful

    I can identify with this poetic write. Isn't it great when you find that one person that can sing the harmony with you? Gret piece of imagery.

    . Rewarded 4


  • A-Dog
    June 8

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    Very well written. I enjoyed reading it. I will have to read some of your other work. Well good job. Keep up the good work.

    ~A-Dog~

    . Rewarded 4


  • darell silver member
    June 8

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    Sing on..

    my sister! Omg! this was excellent in
    every way. your words bring tears to
    my eyes. Such passion and ecstasy.
    I'm in the mood for love and romance now.
    WOW!! What an exquisitely written love poem

    . Rewarded 4

  • WritingWretch silver member
    June 8

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    The only question I have is:

    Stopped in time for what? Sound like you did the right thing by not stopping. Makes me wish (only for a nano-second) I could feel that shared hormone induced surge of romance. What a thrill, vividly expressed.

    . Rewarded 4

  • midnightblue1272
    June 3

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    *whistles in amazement*

    That was spectacular. Words of love expressed beautifully. You & Xianaria are so meant for each other.


  • Xianaria gold member
    June 3
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    My Dear Beloved~

    "I want to freeze that moment
    when your eyes met mine
    in a lovers embrace."

     

    From the moment our eyes met and your smile became reality, I knew for a fact that I, indeed, loved you. The words you've laid before my eyes in this write I relive with the intense emotions of that moment in time, when you and I became complete. Just looking over at you as I read this, seeing the look in your eyes, your smile, knowing you know what I am reading...I cannot express what I am feeling.

     

    "I still tingle every-time
    you look at me
    Time...
    doesn't exist in paradise."

     

    ~ As do I, my Love, and you are correct: Time doesn't exist in Paradise.

    You leave me at a loss for words. This morning as I held you and you told me you did this, I couldn't wait to see what you wrote ~ yet, I was also lost in our current moment of tenderness, so I waited til just now.

     

    I love you, Bride of my Soul~

    You are forever my song
    ~ ♥~

    Tim


  • snowbird600
    June 3

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    PRETTY PRETTY! Great words here.
    You did so well writing this.
    Very soft words with great visualization.
    Love
    Steffany


  • azlyn gold member
    June 3

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    Tender and lovely Sis! Such passion and yet completely graceful...a very enticing piece of erotica!

    Love you~


    Sue


  • myrataal silver member
    June 3
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    I seldom read erotica ...

    but this poem is gentle and lovely.

    Myra

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