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Dancing Across The Moonlight

Sacred geometry,
Visions of you and me,
Colours of poetry forever,

Dance with me into the night,
Underneath that moon so bright,
Like the dark night waltz begin,

Lost here in your embrace,
Moon bathes your radiant face,
Evanescent decadence surrounds,

Time dances everywhere,
With such elaborate flair,
Years could have passed before us,

Here in this pane of glass,
Timelessly whirling past,
Tell me now is this heaven?

As we pedantically play,

In life's majestic ballet,

We fall into the dance of the night,

 

Auburn tresses float around,

Your angels face without a sound,

Tell me, are you a fallen angel?

 

As you turn into the night,

I fall with you in delerious flight,

Raven beauty blends us bound,

 

The strings that move your graceful limbs,

Those clearly carved by seraphims,

And on we waltz in heaven's time,

 

Your immortal hand on mine,

Your perfect smile makes stars align,

End this dance with me,

 

In these final moments before death,

We languish in this final breath,

For we have danced this moonlight dance

For the last time,

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  • LadyDementia gold member
    June 10, 2008

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    Wow the ending is superb! A dark enchanting poem. All the best in the contest


  • storiesuntold gold member
    June 8, 2008

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    Beautiful

    For a person to know and live through the dance of life and also dance to the edge of the return to heaven is blessed in so many ways . For upon the birth and the decend God takes you hands and whispers amen


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    June 3, 2008

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    aww this is just amazing babe,
    its so so vivid with imagination and it blew me away,
    i mean it really is amazing the way you capture such darkend romance and add it with that dark yet light surrounding, my favourite stanza is:

    The strings that move your graceful limbs,

    Those clearly carved by seraphims,

    And on we waltz in heaven's time,



    Your immortal hand on mine,

    Your perfect smile makes stars align,

    End this dance with me,

    it just amazed me with such,
    amazing imagery xxx
    all my love,
    kitty xxx


  • Charlotte Whispers
    June 3, 2008

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    Simple, easy to read, the flow is just beautiful, but this isn't a simple poem. I love the imagery in this. The lines:
    'The strings that move your graceful limbs,
    Those clearly cared by seraphims' and

    'In these final moments before death,
    We languish in this final breath,
    For we have danced this moonlight dance
    For the last time,' All of it is absolutely fantastic stuff.


  • Dmonik
    June 3, 2008

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    I like this...easy flowing, nice to read...all in all, a fine piece of poetry
    Bravo Sis, and keep up the good work

    'D'

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