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Through the clearing
Appears the open meadow
Where the daisies lay down to die

We pulled out our legs
We opened our eyes
Stars slept in our pupils

but the black sky pressed so deep
within my chest, I nearly lost my breath

and I withered
So can you see the shattered kaleidoscope?

And she lay me down blanker, quieter

While I played dead
She caressed numb fingers
To look long into blank eyes
To trace the lines
till my sorrows unfolded into butterflies

the lifeless wings, I fondled with a weightless hand
(no breath in the grass, no warmth in their insect bodies)

In cool night grass
twenty one dead butterflies covered me.

The kaleidoscope shone, it's cracks, it's resemblance
so now, can you see us?

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uck. grunt. blehkh. grrr. frustration. trying to save it.

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  • Zachary Howland
    June 19, 2008

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    really good

    A powerful poem, and I really enjoyed the lines,"In cool night grass
    twenty one dead butterflies covered me."

    And thanks for the comment; mushrooms seem to make everyone a poet!


  • lowlyowl
    June 3, 2008
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    some fantastic imagery here... nicely written