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Hackneyed Promises

you've never seen me
you've never touched me
yet know me with all of your heart
i find that hard to believe

conceived in the dirtiest of slums
a bastard child bore to a bitch of a mother
continuously she wished for my death
i was forced to grow up before my time

my virginity is but only a delusion
given to the highest paying groom
morality and virtue i know i require
i am best laid down on my back

many beds i have slept in
yet my eyes forever droop
heavy from lack of rest
blackened by abusive men

lovers i've had come and go
i have loved them each feverishly
with all the hatred from hackneyed promises
that still burn inside my filled chest

so do not distract yourself
with this illusion of love for me
take the rose colored glasses off
see me for who i truly am

 

i am nothing but empty space

to you or anyone else

just another lost little girl

let down by those who have loved me

how does it make you feel?

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  • vici377
    June 29

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    sad...dark.. yet a very real fate for some..animals are treated better..yet human life is so casually thrown away..gripping write..thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest..blessings..namaste..


  • Missa
    June 29
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    amazing. very powerful poem. and it had a lot of emotion put into it.
  • wow huni this is really beautiful,
    its amazing it really really is,
    i love the imagery youve portrayed here,
    all my love,
    kitty ps i stole the bg


  • Zenda-Lokki gold member
    June 19

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    Excellant

    Wow that was a great poem hun. Very powerful. I hope it helped to release a little through your words. I'm sure Bri will like this as much as I do.
    Think it'll do well in the contest.
    Looks like I have stiff competition hehe
    Good luck hun.

    Del
  • third line, second stanza
  • wow. such anguish and emotion. you do have some typos at the beginning, so you might want to go back at the beginning and examine those. other than that, i liked it. not your usual subject matter and on top of that (no pun intended) you conveyed it well.

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