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season's end

as lake waters cool

 

and harried southbound winds rise high

 

pinpricks of silver struggle

 

to reveal themselves in the darkened skies

 

 

... i feel him

 

 

icy probings in the autumn-tempered air

 

his memory is everywhere

 

stirring in time-stricken trees

 

rustling through discarded leaves

 

 

... our season was all too brief

 

 

falling to my knees

 

i weep

 

upon the hard, cold soil

 

he sleeps beneath

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • trekkergirl
    May 17

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    Wonderful write. You really used imagery well in this one. I can feel sorrow and loneliness in this write. G reat job. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.


  • Reset Button
    June 4, 2008

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    I am captivated by your words. It's heart wrenching. I don't know what it would feel like but I can now imagine. LOVE how your picture perfectly matches your poem.

    I love to come back to your words. Reminds me why you will probably always be one of my favorites. Great job is so pathetic and won't do your poem justice so I will keep them in my trunk of words for someone else.


    Yink


    • malkinpuss
      June 4, 2008
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      youllneverknow

      What wonderful words! I cannot thank you enough. I am totally honoured.


  • myusikah
    June 3, 2008

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    wow, that is very artistic writing. I enjoyed this read. It was really interesting. Good luck!
    -->pia♫♪

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