How many years has it been?
Since I was able to tell you I loved you
And really mean it
How many years have gone by?
Since you could hold me in your arms
Without really having to "Try"
I thought a Mother's love,
Was never supposed to hurt or fade
They said, the older you get the more you'll understand
...But I still don't, and I'm wading in an ocean
Of memories and words...
...Words I've never been able to use
Like, 'Why', like, 'never again', like
'I'm good enough'...
How many years has it been?
Since I was able to tell you I loved you
And really mean it
We've all done things, we're not proud of
Yet, aren't Mothers supposed to forgive their Daughters?
I can't let go, of the words you shout
"Whore", "Bitch", "Liar", "Freak"
Yet, I still find ways to say "I love you"
...Even if it feels like I'm just loaning them...
How many years has it been?
Since I was able to tell you I loved you
And really mean it
Author notes
It's been almost a year since I have written anything.. This is probably not one of my best, but I am rusty. The original contest I entered inspired me to write something. Rent, and especially "What You Own", is very dear to me. I distilled the original song down into something that I could make my own. It may seem a bit cryptic, but I hope that others can feel the Rent! inspiration from it - and also take from it my own personal life experiences..
Especially, this first week in 12 years that there is no Rent! in the Nederlander. RIP 9/7/08.
Slicks78
A contest entry
- Emotions for Rent by bloved.
1150 points, ended June 9, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
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300 points, ended July 30, 2008, 88 entries
Silver trophy winner
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600 points, ended July 11, 2008, 47 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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681 points, ended July 8, 2008, 23 entries
Gold trophy winner
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525 points, ended September 10, 2008, 4 entries
Silver trophy winner
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700 points, ended January 1, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Very well written!
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Truthful
How realistic can you get than what you've penned above. A mother's love is meant to be unconditional, but I think the ideas of what I expect gets in the way of some mothers seeing children for what they are. I must admit, that I was a person that looked at people who dressed in 'Goth' or had tattoos and piercings were in pain. Something horrible had to have happened for them to do the things they do to their body. It hurts me as a parent to see other parents who rather ignore feelings of their children, than confront it, and fix it.
But, I think there are some kids that actually like the look. I have been swayed by my daughter to listen to music that was her style versus my style. Now, I enjoy that music and a different world has opened up.
Your poem definitely conveys feelings and emotion that whether you're a children or a parent in the scenario that you'll be able to relate to the piece. Heck you even got me to comment on the content, versus just the format and poetry.
Excellent job, very heartfelt! Thanks for entering the contest, it is my pleasure having you in the contest. I intend on judging immediately at the close of the contest. -
thank you
Thank you for placing this great creative work into my current contest.I find this piece both engaging and intriging. -
Great Write Thankyou For Sharing Love Always Erica x
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This is a very beautiful emotional piece. Congrats on that. I am a Renthead. Huge Renthead. I just saw a special show with Anthony and Adam touring with the Broadway cast. It was absolutely amazing. I live for Rent and it's pretty much my life :-P I didn't feel the Rent so much as I thought it would be after reading the AN. I was slightly confused. I would have loved this even more if their were a more prevalent feeling of Rent. But it was still beautiful. The whole repetition and stuff was excellently used. I enjoyed this the whole way through. Good job.
Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest :]
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My....
I, at one time, could relate to this piece
My mother and I didn't speak for many years and then a wonderful miracle happened and now, I don't know what I'd do without her
This is a very emotional piece and I hope that things work out for you (if this is a true to life piece)
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this was so beautiful!
i love your writing style. :]
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A very personal piece, which I thank you for sharing.
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Holy shit this was great. I honestly started crying. I'm going through a lot with my mom right now, and this just hit home. I'm still crying actually lol. But yeah, EXCELLENT write. I could so relate.
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I feel this way with my mom all the time. That is what drew me in first. It wasn't just because this was in my contest. I wanted to see what would be said. I liked this piece. It carried just enough emotion not to drag it down. Excellent job and good luck in my contest.
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wonderfully emoyi\\tional thanks for entering and good luck in the contest and in life. thanks for entering
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That was lovely, truly. Sent shivers down my spine
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this is horrifying in its sadness. It makes me want to hug you and make all of the pain dissipate ... nice write though. Putting the anger into poetry. good job
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Don't forget your name in the author's notes.
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nicely done. good luck in the contest.
Janine -
I can kind of feel the Rent-ish in this, but not much. It was very sad, not having a mother's love, and always being put down. Thanks for your entry in our contest
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very nice write.. it doesn't flow as well as some of your others, but is still nice. thank you for entering
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How many years has it been?
Since I was able to tell you I loved you
And really mean it
Not bad. Thanks for entering and good luck
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very good thanks for the entry not bad
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Great
I see no rust I hear no rust PLEASE write more and from the heart just like this one. Thank you so much for the read, Boog -
They said, the older you get the more you'll understand
...But I still don't, and I'm wading in an ocean
Of memories and words...
Favorite Line!
Good Job!
&& GOOD LUCK!
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This is very powerful emotion in this poem. I enjoyed that aspect a lot. It made me feel so sad for both you and your child. I have been angry with my daughter but never like this. Best of luck to you and may you find the love again
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Thank you for the beautiful entry to my contest,
This poem is beautiful and touching, I know that personally I have done things that my mother wasn’t proud of and didn’t want to admit them. I know that it hurts me when my son says things to me and he is only 8. (I hate you) and I always try to respond with I love you, and then he gets mad and asks me why I always say that, I told him that I will always love him. I do feel pain from it. I really hope we both realize these things before it comes to late to share those feelings, I never want to loose the truth when I tell him that I love him, I want it to continually mean something, As always keep up the wonderful writing, ~ Amy
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thats a wonderfull poem you have written down.....exetremly touching.......
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You, you touched my heart in a way so many of these poems have failed to do, I have gone through this as well.. And I know how badly it hurts. Thank you so much for entering and managing to break my heart.
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wonderful
i loved reading this and i can tell that you worked very hard on this poem and i am glad you got an honorable award i like how you used the words "how many years....." and i can tell you took your time on this its very well written and worded and thanks for taking the time to share your wonderful well written poem with me and i cant wait to read more of your poems -
Wow very interesting i like it alot its very very well written and worded so greatly. And plus you made the point that you were trying to make. Thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck. ..<3.. Shelly
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wow! such pain and then again such wondering.....wow!
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I thought it was so painful honest it was hard to read, but good all the same
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This is really good love and applaud you for being so brave and so honest...this stuck me because your words were so painful and so relateable. I really can feel you.
Thank you so much for your entry...this was not rutsy at all.
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