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The Shock

I would've never guessed
I would've never knew
That you would be the same as me
I would've never seen that in you

I am thinking now
That life deceives me
Appearances
People
Personalities

But I thought I knew you
I thought I was sure
In the end
What I found out was even better

Author notes

This is my first poem in a while. I hope it's alright. Constructive criticism is appreciated, as it only makes me a better, stronger writer.

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  • Lowercase Prelude gold member
    June 16
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    This is a good piece, but I think if you expounded on it a bit, it could be better


  • bnicole
    June 4
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    wow an amazing write! trully beautiful hun!!

  • xDisasterous Angelx
    June 4
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    I think its good... just keep up the good writing

  • brat prince lestat gold member
    June 3
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    Dude, I didn't even know you were a poet... or at least this good of one. I like this, it's tight.

  • In-the-Darkness
    June 2
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    Great write. Truely bravo.


  • Eyes Wide Shut gold member
    June 2
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    This is good - The ending seemed rough to me because your last line was a lot longer than the others, but I loved it other than that. It really does suck to find out someone isn't who you thought - it's almost heartbreaking [unless they didn't matter TOO much].

    Keep up the good writes or write..

    haha.

    *Austyn


  • teddybare
    June 2
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    none needed far as i can see

    this is a good write

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