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the friction of roads

 inclinations burn
like unto pavement
intention drags upon

 

 felicity fumbles
closer fruition
as life extends
numerous affronts
like oil slicks
to sunken heart

 

Author notes

All those years, they were here first
Oily marks appear on walls
Where pleasure moments hung before

The take-over
The sweeping insensitivity of this,
Still alive-- hide and seek by imogen heap

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  • delightfulmess silver member
    June 3, 2008

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    Yes... Love the opening couplet
    Great take Brother and congrats on the shiney green.


    Delila


  • tara wilson gold member
    June 3, 2008

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    I really like this title..

    "like oil slicks
    to sunken heart" - excellent, well done, Mark


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    June 3, 2008

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    Life does extend a lot of those!! And boy are they slippery on the heart!!
    Awesome bro!


  • Tattboyspet
    June 3, 2008

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    'like oil slicks
    to sunken heart'
    LOVELY imagery!
    congrats on the HM


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    June 2, 2008

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    You went deep and gave me some great creative poetic words for the prompt here Mark..Throughly enjoyed reading


    Good luck

    Cindy


  • The Unknown Poet1
    June 2, 2008
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    First off congrats ion kicking my arse last quickie This is quite the metaphoric write I might have to get creative in the future and stop rhyming lol Nice use of alteriation. Nice imagery well placed throughout. well penned and good luck in the contest


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    June 2, 2008
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    w00t w00t hehe

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