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my own cliche

I woke up feeling sorry

For your loss of soul

Your lack of conformity

I almost

Started to want to change you

Help you into a better skin,

But then I realized,

If I did that… I would have no one.

Not a single one to hate,

And where would that leave me,

But one step south to your alibi,

And I'll miss you when you realize

You never made it into my world,

And I never loved the old you,

More than the now you, the abused you,

The desperate you. I'll never forgive you

For changing, for never being that one,

For that loss, for that , for

That everything.

Because maybe if I forgave,

I'd forget, I'd own that cliché

Like it was meant for me,

Like I was never yours, or even theirs.

Like I was tied to something stranding,

Forbidden, and forlorn. Something that reminds me

Of loving, being loved, and lost by you.

There's a cycle resembling a spiral,

Staying north to your south, I'll never crash

Like you, like you have before.

I've been down, I've seen your low,

I'll never let your past own me.

Author notes

My boyfriend and I of over two years broke up. A lot of bad things happened...and so this particular write is about him.

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  • DarkRomantic113
    June 10, 2008

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    I am glad you stood strong after your breakup. They're quite awful, the ones that matter. You've delicately described your feelings. Well-penned.


  • myrataal silver member
    June 9, 2008

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    So. Now you little brave one ...

    a bright future awaits you! YAY!



    Writing the clichés of sorrow is smoothing out the path towards rejuvenating, zesty, freshness.

    Do it over. And again if you must. And again. Until you find the key to eternal belonging.
    For Love cannot be perfected by you, but by Love itself. So do not hide.



    Love
    Myra


  • Sarah957
    June 8, 2008

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    Wow. Yo said on your authors page that yo liked getting criticisms to make your write better and i applaud that. i feel the same way! i think yo wrote something profound that really sucked me in i loved it!


  • NicoleAlyce
    June 8, 2008

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    I could not have written it better myself. Lots of powerful emotion in this Jess. Very very well done.

  • DarkRomantic113
    June 3, 2008
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    Great intuition. Sorry for your breakup.

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