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Illusion

Spinelessly I crawl
Towards the glowing, warm light
Which always evades.

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  • sighingflosser.
    October 26
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    Spinelessly I crawl
    -good use of the word 'spineless.'

    and evades, too.


  • letters to no one
    January 9

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    Ohhh

    Me likey

    Tis quite creepy and eerie and dark, my favourite!

    Shelly
    xxx


  • Rhythm Child
    November 23, 2008

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    very thought provoking poem and such a great message through so little of words


  • aanika
    June 26, 2008
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    i feel like ive read this already?
    ohwell even if i have i love it
    spinelessly i crawl -- so eerie.


  • etoile
    June 9, 2008
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    thankyou. =)


  • And Hyetal
    June 7, 2008

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    hmm, a nice dark write. Very creepy. I also love the title, gives the whole haiku a mysterious feel.

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