Breakable face,
Stares at the mirror.
Flawless outer skin
But inside empty and alone.
Cold to the touch,
With glazed eyes
Won’t ever blink.
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i love the last stanza. i like this a lottt.
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i really like the title to this. and how true this poem is about being flawless and miserable...to me i see how fake people turn, and then they wonder why they are so miserable.lol. well take care
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"Breakable face,
Stares at the mirror."
Wow.
Loves it
I mean, beautiful.
Shelly
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mmm i like this great idea, best of luck
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I like the initial idea, I thought it was kind of well thought out.
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ahh this reminds me of dolls sitting on a shelf
*glazing eyes should be glazed eyes i think
but iuno
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I read this. . .and it felt like I've read it hundreds of times before. . .not that that's necessarily bad. It just gave it an eerie quality. Which is appropriate for the message you're conveying here. You used the idea of ceramic pretty well, I thought, the flow was a little off'd somewhere along the way, I'm not really sure where. I like the internal rhyme of skin and blink, though, since that definitely adds some flair. Thanks for the entry. This is good.
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