My anger boils over,
like a cup of cocoa left
too long in the microwave.
It pops and bubbles,
creating a mess.
I hate her.
I hate you.
I realize this is not
healthy and I hate that too.
But in the grand scheme
of things, this
is completely your doing. So,
when she calls, crying
because her crazy ex-boyfriend
is hanging out at her apartment and
she can't get him to leave -
I don't fucking care.
When he finds out about you and her
you'll both have bigger
problems.
You whine to me about being
afraid for her. You should be glad
that I am numb. Because if I felt like
this every day, I'd have killed you and I
would ruin her life.
By any means necessary.
Happily,
I'm self contained.
I take my anger out, on myself instead.
I rape my thoughts of anything remotely
of you. And burn my memories in a great
cauldron of bullshit. I cut,
physical pieces of myself, lay around
the room, still seeping my essence.
The air steals my breath
but, I don't really need it anymore.
I exist solely now
to move past you. I would love to hurt you.
Would love to see you broken,
bent, obliterated. But,
I am a Good Woman.
And I will find a
Better Man
than you.
Author notes
Sooo, I'm a little angry tonight.
In a list
A contest entry
- Anger (Mis)Management by breedluv.
1400 points, ended August 19, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Angry Anyone?? by A-Daisy-Among-Roses.
900 points, ended December 6, 2008, 16 entries
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Wow, Wow, Wow¬!!! this fanbloodytastic! i love it. Every single word has so so much emotion. The anger, hatrid and pure venom is just brilliant. I can really relate to the amount of built up pent up anger you hold inside. And like you say.......one day it will explode and will destruct. I am so sorry to hear that you take out 'his' problems on your self and take out your feelings to wards him on your own un deserving body. You do not deserve that pain as well as the emotional pain but i know oh to well how it in some ways makes things better. If you ever need to talk i am here to listen hun. My favourite part of this whole poem has to be ' rape my thoughts of anything remotely
of you. And burn my memories in a great
cauldron of bullshit. I cut,
physical pieces of myself, lay around
the room, still seeping my essence.' Just brilliant! thank you so much for entering my contest it was a true honor to read such incredible work
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i like ur anger in this
niceee write !
thank u for ur entry
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love the frist few lines. your comparison of your anger and hot chocolate is different than the usual just i am so mad shit, so i like it alot. good job
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wow nice emotion!!! it needs a little editing but other than that i see the hate in every line and its beautiful in a sick demented kind of way
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Thank you. What would you recommend editing?
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they're relativly small mistakes like in line 8 you spelled realise when I think it should be realize. there are little mistakes like that that just need to be touched up
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Fixed!
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By the way, thanks - this piece was written in a fury so I am quite surprised that there are not more technical errors! -
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awesome!!
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I feel your anger. I like the stream-of-consciousness feel of this. Nice write.
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A nice vent but what does it have to do with being bi-polar. I feel anger and rage but ...
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RAW!
First, let me say that this read to me like one of those letters that you write to vent out the blend of hideous feelings that are swirling around inside of you like a tornado….but you never deliver it. Should you fail to destroy it, you come upon it months or even years later and somehow it instantly stirs up those same old emotions that you poured into it….like it’s giving back the horrid gift that you purged onto its pages. You laid it out there raw, strong, and no holds barred. Well done! Elaina
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Great write loved the form it was unique. you will be considered.
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Loved this alot. With such emotion and greatness. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck
..<3..
Shelly -
'I am a Good Woman.
And I will find a
Better Man
than you.'
I wish in thses situations we could all just move past the rest and arrive straight to this point. As the years go by and there are less in front of us, believe me, there is less time to waste on losers! (yet I have just wasted another year doing exactly that!! grrrrrr..)
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I love the affirmation of the last line. I -WILL-.
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Applauds!!!!
Hell yeah!!! I know that I have felt this way before and you did a great job in ranting. I wouldn't apologize for your feelings either. GREAT JOB! -mandie-
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i didn't realize that you had written this, and i was about to recommend this to you, then of course i realized this was yours.......it speaks well, its raw, and bitter, but its great.
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i remember when my writing was fueled by anger but i don't ever remember me getting it out quite as well as this. (it used to help me deal with things) I really do like this because its a really emotionally raw piece.
love it love it love it
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Writing can be incredibly emotionally cathartic, and it seems you have achieved a level of release for yourself with this piece. I like the down to earth approach, recognizing the anger, knowing it's okay to be angry and knowing one has choices about how to release their anger. Insightful also into how anger is often turned on the self. Personally, I think if it's not okay to hurt others, then it's not okay to hurt yourself either, but society subliminally teaches otherwise, unfortunately. Good write!
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way to unleash! FEARLESSLY!!!!!!!
POWERFUL BOLD WRITE! It is amazing isn't it....how
mighty...it hits.."when enough is enough"
I hope this really helped you unleash all that dust,
mold and rot inside, because I gotta tell you,
a powerful poetess does reside in your soul!
way to write!
i think some of us are still hiding under our chairs!
ears/Seattle way to write it out!
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You took the words right out of my mouth. This is absolutely wonderful! It's okay to be angry and feel the way you feel. I think that whoever you wrote this about should stumble upon it. I would love to tell you that it gets easier and that letting go will come naturally but I can't. Writing is the only way I know how to get my emotions out. This is a prime example of what that really means. Way to go! Great write!
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woah. leave him alone for sure! forget about him and that he exists. he's not worth cutting yourself. my fav"
I am a Good Woman.
And I will find a
Better Man
than you.
you write it but you don't believe it. hold onto yourself and go out and enjoy yourself. take care. -
The anger really does seem to boil over in this poem and sometimes that can be a really really good thing. Great work.
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sweet venom
Yeah ....you sound super pissed.
Nice job letting off some steam and getting a good poem out of it....proof that a Good Woman can multi-task.
I could go on and on about how relateble this is to me, except I think thats what you get from me everytime I read you....were you dating my ex freakin' husband? Jeeze! Im starting to wonder!
....as is everything of yours I have read, this is packed with emotion...and you said it best, which makes me happy that you already know...."I will find a Better Man than you..." and YES you will! SO SCREW THAT ASSHOLE, right? Go on and be angry....makes for a damn good read.
Great write!
Jamie
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I think I adore you!
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A toxic write!
Woah! Remind me not to ever make you upset! OMG! You really do evoke the emotion of hatred here, sending goosebumps all over me.
Good to let it out though and breathe again. Your form indicates these are emotions flowing out onto the page, which is exactly what it is, so very appropriate. Your choice of line breaks is puzzling but in extreme anger we are usually somewhat incoherent and this only adds to the feelings here.
Hope you feel better soon
alby
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Aww, thanks! I'm already a little better...gotta cut this stuff loose. Thanks for reading. Sorry it's not a happier deal...I did some cutesy ones earlier!
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