Though I still
breathe you
more deeply
than before
and wish your
comforting caress
ever near
I let you go...
Author notes
Prompt:
"If you were here I'd never have a fear.
So go on live your life.
But I miss you more than I did yesterday."
- My Chemical Romance
20 words
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie 10-20-30 by markgrif.
475 points, ended June 2, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Straight to the heart
Simply beautiful and most touching, sentiments not unfamiliar to my heart. Excellent write! Best of luck in contest.
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Ahhh... Been here too.
Dez
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and in "letting go" the air you shall breathe will be that of new life and hope
Joe
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This was emotionally-pulling on the heart. Stunning words here of 'letting go' at last. Wonderful piece. Well done on your silver Kiwi.
With
Dark
Love
Wayne Leon
xx
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Thank you Wayne!
xx
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Simply stated and emotionally touching. I'm sure many can relate to this. Very much enjoyed!!!!!
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Damn... This is certainly poignant indeed! A very well expressed take on the lyric prompt. Something I can sink into...
Great write my dear!
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omg so sad and captivating in so little words SiS.
brilliant, congrat's on the silver
Cin
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Only freaking silver? I WANT A FRIGGING RECOUNT! GIMME A RECOUNT! THIS CONTEST WAS RIGGED! Here's three bunnies for your trouble.
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You're funny!
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Mhm. Thanks for noticing.
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tugging my heart strings...
Great emotional imagery
Woooo Hoooo... Nice new silver shiney.
Delila
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"Though I still
breathe you
more deeply
than before"
I really like this - well done on the silver
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Amazing! This is a poem that I believe many can relate to. It is very heartfelt and full of emotions. wow! I am speechless. I love the flow of this! Congrats on the Silver! ♥
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Very simple and breathy.
"ever near" is a nice phrase and the ending perfectly matches the ellipsis--has that sigh-inducing feeling again. Lots of self-awareness and self-conflict going on in this write!
Kudos on the silver Jacks...=] -
Congrats on the silver!
Parting of the waves, such sweet sorrow Well not for them obviously A beautifully penned poem hunni and great first read of the day 
Congrats on the silver
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Great write
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Aww this was so beautifully emotional sis! I so know the feeling, letting go is one of the hardest things to do.. and you've described it so perfectly. Loved it!
Congrats on silver
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Outstanding
Love the way this poem depicts the romance before the parting! Could feel the feelings of the writer so well. Excellent job! Congrats on the silver! Don
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Well this sums up a certain situation quite well dont you think...!! I love it, makes me want to cry though
lol. Congrats on silver its great!! xx
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aww ... yeah. The air kinda hisses out when that happens, but eventually life pumps back in and you realize a need to move on ... forward ... anything really, as long as one is moving.
Congrats on da silver chalice My Kiwi Queen!
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Hey
Hold on Baby. Tighter and tighter
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Excellent
Wonderful creation. So very well expressed. Congratulations on the silver.
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Well penned 20 words for your silver.
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This rings with a simple truth that captures so many os in the game of love. This started strong and finished as it should, with strength, love for oneself probaly the most difficult task life ever serves upon our overfilled plate. Nicely done and congrats on the silver well deserved
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Why did you enter? Because it was deserving of a silver! Well done
I really like this. It's sad but the ending is perfect, like coming to terms with things. Recognising the loss but allowing yourself the freedom to let go. Now teach me how to do that.
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I've been there, and it still haunts me to this day. What a lovely write sweet lady. I wish you all the luck!!
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I really like the imagery in your first stanza. Another person is the very breath of life, very nice. The internal sacrifices we make for life's decisions. Wonderful take on the prompt! Keep your pen to the page and good luck in the contest! (get better soon!)
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awww
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Sweet sorrow... We test the bonds of love by letting go... yet it always intensifies the need!!! Time will tell if it was meant to be!!! Very nice!!!
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wonderful, opposite of mine, i don't want to let go
you rock
here's some chicken noodle soup
TAsha
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This is so sad Jacks, you do sad well.
Love and peace always,
mj.
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good luck to you too, hope you feel better soon
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