Our love is like a comma in a phrase.
It represents the bond that we've begun.
Although it tends to split us different ways,
the comma always links us both as one.
Our love is like a comma in a line
that gives our hearts a concentrated lift.
The balance that we share is most divine,
since structure is a comma's greatest gift.
Our love is like a comma in a book
that helps the reader see each word and clause.
The fights we have don't need a second look,
once commas bear their ever-perfect pause.
Our love can be an everlasting trend --
a comma never signifies the end,
Author notes
An English Sonnet
I ended it with a comma intentionally.
What does this poem mean to you?
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Wonderfully done
-GL in contest -
Nice analogy, definitely an interesting idea, and I think a worthy parallel. I've been reading through a number of your poems and I really like the unique angle and wordplay.
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This is such an interesting idea! I like the way you worked the sonnet form to your advantage. Also, the ending is just brilliant.
Thanks for entering.
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made me smile :)
What a great idea! i like the positive vibe of the poem and the way a comma and its grammatical uses, such as 'links', 'pause' and 'structure' are linked to some of the most important parts of a relationship between people. Simple yet brilliantly executed i feel, made me smile
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i love sonnets! this is nice, thanks for the entry!
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This is FANTASTIC!!! I love the ending! Simply beautiful! Beautifully written, I have never thought of a comma like that. Wow, I was just talking to my 'friend' and 'teacher' about "figurative language." Boy did you turn a light on, and grammatically excites me! I can't wait to see who you are.
Actually I would had taken the time to really think about what to write properly for you. But, I'm just too excited. Nice Job...Thank you for entering the round contest ~ Good luck to you. -
This is a very competent sonnet, on a very neatly-expressed theme. I am visiting it because I always do check out the trophy winners in any contest were I get a podium place myself. Even though it doesn't show up there, congratulations on the trophy.
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wow, i really like this one, its amzing how well you write,
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Indeed a fascinating thought and well written sonnet. Straight to the finalist list!
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I've never written a sonnet, but yours is splendid...
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Aww such a sweet and simple piece. The italicized words in the last lines of the stanzas really bring it together. And what a good idea, to end in a comma for this poem! How cute
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"Although it tends to split us different ways,
the comma always links us both as one." For some reason I absolutely loved those lines.
This is awesome!!! It's sweet and written well. And the ending was possibly my favorite part. The comma at the end was a great idea.
Well penned, I love it!!
~QoA
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Nicely done sonnet, and I for a love poem I found it to be quite good with a fairly unique idea. Meter, form, rhyme and flow all look good. Best of luck to you with it in the contest.
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Aw, love is like proper punctuation. I wish more men thought like that. This is a really awesome little write, mainly because it expresses your ideas so...originally!
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awesome
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Wow, I love the way you used something as simple as a comma to signify love. Great write you have here, with good meter, and rhyme, and everything. Nice job!
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Sweet. I like how you used punctuation to signify love and adoration within a relationship. great job. -mandie-
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hum. this imagery in quite thought provoking.
i like your thinking, sir.
i've never really quite cross-examined the english language in a metaphorical sense before. thanks for the enlightenment. and now, thanks to you, i'll probably be thinking about this all day >.< -
Wow, as a punctuation geek I have to enjoy the conceit of love as a comma. Perfect rhyme scheme. In the last line of the second stanza should it be "structure is a comma's greatest gift" rather than in?
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What the hell... I read over this poem about twenty times, and I never saw that. I guess my brain just "assumed" it was the right word. Thank you for always being there to spot my little mistakes.
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Wow, as a punctuation geek I have to enjoy the conceit of love as a comma. Perfect rhyme scheme. In the last line of the second stanza should it be "structure is a comma's greatest gift" rather than in?
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Well written you use things that people would'nt normally see much less write about I look forward to the next that you will write KLEROO
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lovely words
you did great with this poem loved reading keep it up and best to you in the contest!
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