Forsooth, I have found myself forsaken,
comrades that were once are no more,
for a subtle darkness stole my light,
abandoning my soul on Hell's shore.
Carrion crow's cackles fill the night,
while this search now goes on,
for more power to supply me,
twisting this form, hidden from the dawn.
Trails followed find dead ends,
terrible prices paid in flesh,
to gather time unto my heart,
tangled tricks young souls enmesh.
Feed the growing contorted beast,
ravening my dimming light,
filling this abysmal flesh,
that shambles on throughout the night.
A time of reckoning soon draws near,
these enchanted senses tell,
for the hunter has become the hunted,
comrades old scent I know so well.
They seek to end this land of my curse,
lay me low and bury me deep,
break the cycle of fear each night,
so innocents can find sweet sleep.
Yet that day has not yet come,
for I hide my presence from them still,
seeking to go on forever hunting,
taken hold has Evil of my will.
The moon shines to guide my path,
another victim of stolen laugh,
succumbs to feed the growing need,
born the day I held this cursed staff.
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A contest entry
- In Darkness or Light by JeannieD Hunter.
1000 points, ended June 6, 2008, 23 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow....I am almost at a loss for words. This is astounding. So much thought provoking imagery in this finely written piece. The tale keeps one waiting for the next line. Dullness never a factor. Congrats on the much deserved gold. Bravo...bravo...bravo...my hat is off to you my friend...
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What a wonderfully written dark adventure...done so well in flow and rhyme...it held the readers attention so well till the end...when evil sets in can we ever turn back???
Congrat's on the well deserved Gold...excellent job luv...
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WOW!!! this is amazing!!
Sensational Flow. And such a well deserved golden beauty.
Delila
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CONGRATS ON THE SHINY GOLDEN DREAM OF POE-tic DARKNESS!! love you my dear brother very well earned indeedy!!
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Wonderful, Dark and Rhyming!
Great job,
Sassy
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Oh yea, and it rhymed too.
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Excellently done David. I like this a lot, but then we both know we like this genre. Great job on grabbing up the Gold...Scott
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Wonderful
the flow an the character build was awesome an the images took me on a dark journey i loved
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excellent!
Your words take the reader on a very dark adventure, and tell of this creature's ravenous appetite.
Excellent images, and rhyme.
Congrats on the Gold!
Ethereal One
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This is bloody brilliant, was captivated from beginning to end. A dark tale that leaves you feeling sorry for the guy. Best of luck in the contest.
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wow my dear one this was awesome and Sir Edgar would be proud as us the reader is kept entranced thtoughout the entire write with the profound imagery. I love it!!I can't pick a specific stanza i preferred the most within my heart. xxx well done and many loving blessings always xxx
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Awesome!! You drew me in from beginning to end! Incredible imagery that keepers the reader enthralled! Thanks for this awesome entry and good luck!
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