My heart is torn in two tonight
Only you can help it mend
My mind eclipsed with thoughts of fright
I fear this might be the end
I have not seen you in so long
I’ve missed you everyday
I hope you return to where you belong
But for this I can only pray
I am missing you more and more than ever
More than words can say
Reminiscing of things we’ve done together
Longing for you to stay
Our love too pure, I can’t pretend
We’re not meant to be apart
Forever yours right to the end
Return, so my heart can mend
A contest entry
- quickie by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended June 2, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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well what more can be said
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Thank you tons for sharing this.
The rhyming was great, and the poem was just as smooth. I feel as though I'm in this kinda situation now andI love how i can see my face in the words, you know?
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I really liked your poem. I think you made a good choice entering this one in a contest. Flows well,really sweet&simple, and so so many people can relate.
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Very powerful indeed,written beautifully also,this is a unique write and I hope you find the love you seek,Hazel
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Very sad and sweet write. I could feel the desperation of love throughout. No snags in the flow or forced feelings. I really enjoyed it. Pen on...~Poo~
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Beautiful poem that read well out loud, full of raw emotion....feel better
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Skattie jy het n spel foutjie!hart-heart!Jippy ek het iets raak gesien!
I like this style, its sooooooo not you, its very raw!
Its plain and to the point,but still poeticly Brilliantly written!
Love your work!
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Dankie skattie!
Liefies
Ekke
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When I read your poem it brought tears to my eyes. I know exactly how you felt when writing this.
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very well ritten
i liked the third stanza third line
such a great meaning
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