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I feel the sun beat down upon my back
A drop of sweat slides down my face
As I cry for water
All I get is heat
My feet blistered and burnt
My hands trembling and full of sweat
I feel as If dying

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  • RainbowGirl257
    July 1, 2008

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    i really like the subject, it's summer where i am so i can relate to it. I also like the short sentences you used. about the last line, isn't dying spelt like this?
    anyway, thanks for your entry and good luck.