Eyes closed tight, I see the summer winds,
blowing away my dreams of yesterday.
Time has not been gentle, only endless,
it brings forth fury among winds of change.
Faster and faster visions swirling past me,
I no longer reach for yesterday's dreams.
Though gone, they return for a brief moment,
love rushes in, that once consumed my being.
The pain of lost love never truly disappears,
it subsides into hidden chambers of one's heart.
I retreat into darkness and sorrow of lost love,
Past dreams hushed in the summer wind's rush!
Tears fall as the darkness surrounds me,
once again lost love ravages me with pain.
Eyes flutter trying to open and escape,
back to new found sunshine and happiness.
In a list
A contest entry
- Close your eyes and tell me what you see by Meroza.
400 points, ended June 18, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Touching
The past can be painful, your words express deeply the hurt in your soul but also point the way to the healing that time brings,
The pain of lost love never truly disappears,
it subsides into hidden chambers of one's heart.
I retreat into darkness and sorrow of lost love,
Past dreams hushed in the summer wind's rush!
This stanza was simply awesome in its expression and yet through all your pain you still look to the light for better days ahead. You are an amazing person and this is another amazing write from you, i am honoured to read your work and wish peace in your heart and soul
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What A Wonderful Comment!!
This comment was so thoughtful and lovely my friend. One that has had a broken heart can relate to my words. There is always hope and I do try to remember that. Thank you for stopping by and reading. Your comment was so nice to read. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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This is a truly wonderful poem that touchs the heart of all who read it, a most personal and sad write, you take the reader into your soul with words, great job, blessing John
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Well written!
Deeply personal and sad, this isn't what I expect from you. But, I am aware that I also, keep part of me separate from my writing. This is a well done piece of prose whose ending softens the effect of the rest of the poem, showing us the potential of hope for the new day.
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Sadness
THe words here were so sad. I can realte some to love lost that will never be regained. On the other hand, I have a love very much gained now and has lasted for many years. Guess, I am most blessed.
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Good Morning
Thank you for stopping by and reading. So nice to hear from you. You take care, Sandy
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*whisper* Wow.
Very haunting, Sandy. I sense a lot of hurt in this one. Very sad story told here.
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Nice Comment
Thank you Jaime, Thank you so much for reading and commenting. You take care, Sandy
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I can see the emotion poured into this poem. This rings true and the reader gains insight for the narrator. I feel the poetic craft move through the strength of the narrator. Points fit the target mood. The thrust of love that fades with the rush of the wind.The sadness search for some light with the becon light that stabs through lonliness reminding the narrator and reader that life is one step forward at a time.Good luck with the contest.
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Wonderful Comment!!!!!
Hello, Once again your words are so thoughtful. I am so glad you stopped by. Always a nice way to start my day. You take care my friend,
Bless You,
Sandy
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Oh this poem is so sad! I feel bad for making you see and feel what you did.
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Thank you for the thoughtful comment.
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