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Lone Wolf

I am a lone wolf in every way
I live my life day by day
with no worry or dismay
but yet I remain unknown.

I am above you all
yet I walk below
and I am always in control
but yet I remain unknown.

I read your mind
and feel your soul
and see through your eyes as if my own
but yet I remain unknown.

My presence is felt wherever I go
like a ghost in the darkness I do roam
like a candle burning all alone
but yet I remain unknown.

Life is but a game to me
nothing but pieces and strategy
I make up the rules as I go
but yet I remain unknown.

I am a lone wolf as you know
and that's why I remain unknown.   

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  • BlackSwan
    June 29, 2008
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    Nice write
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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    June 20, 2008

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    This is touching indeed..well done..I love this piece..thanks for your wonderful entry....my friend.....


  • FightOffYourDemons
    June 9, 2008

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    Okay let's get the nitpicking out of the way first.
    When you say presents you mean presence. Spelling mistakes bother me so.
    Also I don't like the dotting... It just doesn't really work in your poem. I mean dotting insinuates that there is something more to be said when here there really doesn't seem to be. If you wanted to make the statement seem mmore questioning than I think that you could add a question mark. If that wasn't the point than you should just have a period or nothing.
    Your poem overall is kinda catchy. I like the repetition it draws your attention back so does the mystery of it.

    Thanks for entering my contest.
    Nikki


  • rawr41507
    June 2, 2008
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    love it!

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