Shredded gown hangs lifeless in the wardrobe
diamond ring flushed away
photo's torn into tiny pieces
mirror smashed
glass came in handy
deep gouges down the jag'
cigarette burns on the seats
tyres slashed to ribbons
he promised...
Author notes
prompt-Marry Me
A contest entry
- Free Verse Writers....It's Time To Be Creative by Dalaney.
975 points, ended June 3, 2008, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - laura's 50th-gold-trophy celebration by Immortal Obscurity.
400 points, ended July 4, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A deserved winner
This is the stuff I wish I could write. A deserved winner in my books.
Terry
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Aw
This was so powerful for such a short poem. The last two words really got me! Awesome, Jane
( And congrats on the gold!)
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I SAID NOT THE JAG!!!
Congratulations on the gold.
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great poem, a well-lighted story of hope and love betrayed. but, for goddsakes, women ... women! not the jag, please. n-o-t the jag! (and sell the ring). -silverfish
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I think all women will like this one and understand the need for someone to feel this way. It may not solve anything or be sensible but it certainly would make you feel better for a while. You have captured that whole "feeling" very well, good job it is only make-believe. Well done.
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