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~ Choices ??~



Turbulence played us once more-
As she impaled our possibilities-
So be it, my heart sighed-
For our frustrations of each ~ like lava~

Offering her breakfast on China-
Her arms folded tightly in denial-
Sitting it beside her I depart-

Five steps, it sails past my head-

“I’m certainly glad you can shoot-
Better than you throw?”
“Vaya al infierno!”
Her favored response ~ once again~

Thus, my decision was made-
On that cool autumn morning-
The fog lifting from my mind-
As my heart swallowed oblivion-

Packing my two bags in slow haste-
Upon the end of our bed-
A bed of memories ~ cherished~
Zipping the bags, my lights flick out-

Awakening upon my stomach-

Discovering wrists tied to my ankles-
Behind me-
Trussed up like a rodeo steer-

 

Attempting to roll on my side-
Felt cold steel upon my temple-
And a colder stare ~ from Consuela~
Her eyes half closed, sweet smile gone-

As she cocked the trigger-
She bent down and whispered in my ear-
You either leave this way-
Or my way-

“And pray tell darlin sweetness-“
What is your way?
As it appears you have the upper hand-
For now-“

Moving in closer she exclaimed;
“Bastard!” You might find this way easier!”
Smelling the gun oil, I replied; “Try me-
Or pull the trigger dear”

“Oh, you deserve to be killed-
Or so I thought many times-
But not by a bullet-
When I can do it so much slower“

"Consider marrying me?"


Quickly  calculating that was a choice-
One could live with- ~ I reply ~


“Sure, por que no?”

 

 

Author notes

there "is" a difference between a proposal...and
a ~ demand ~

especially when spoken by ~ a woman ~

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  • Gold Hat
    June 3, 2008

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    I became a little distracted because of your inconsistent punctuation, but the story pulled me back. This is one of the more imaginative entries in this contest, which I am reading with fascination and delight.


    • JohnnyD gold member
      June 3, 2008

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      A Brit eh? Love em, really do, and the Aussies. I am full blooded Scot, both sides of the family. Lovely isle, truly.

      As for the punctuation-
      done on purpose-
      as life itself-
      is inconsistent and distracting-
      thus they are snippets of thoughts-
      not sentences-
      and rarely complete-
      Consuela, I knew many years back-
      and a few weeks ago-
      decided to do a series on her-
      part of it fictitious-
      part of it true-
      and many parts-
      blended-
      as if by a Vitamix-
      I started with Chapter four/Scene three-
      and am now on Chapter four/scene eight

      which parts are true-
      which are fictitious?
      in truth-
      that matters no more-
      than whether one cloud-
      in the sky-
      is fluffier than another-
      as they all intermingle-
      their truths and lies-

      Glad to make your acquaintance



      Len

      • Gold Hat
        June 3, 2008
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        Hmm, ok about the punctuation if you say so, but to me something like:

        “Bastard!” You might find this way easier!”

        really looks odd - where does the second quotation mark really belong? And/or the third? But it's your piece, and good luck to you with it.


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    June 3, 2008
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    Interesting


  • Cannonsfire
    June 2, 2008
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    lol Another tempting episode in this story and still serves to whet the appetite for me Love, c


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    June 2, 2008

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    Bravo....this was wonderful,excellent imagery...
    You are a fantastic storyteller my dear man...lol
    Many blessings...
    and a beautiful birthday.
    ~A~


    • JohnnyD gold member
      June 2, 2008
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      I still have gun oil running down my temple-
      the smell is unforgettable-


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    June 2, 2008
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  • fortyninereasons gold member
    June 2, 2008

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    hmmm A very interesting write for you to post on the day of your birth!!! Juls

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