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Symphony of Chaos

Clashing chords rise and fall;
The breaths of the living,
the silence of the dead.

 

Harp-strings of hope fall to pieces,

while violent basses thunder in the distance.

The rising of screams disguised as flutes,

the harmony of cries masked as clarinets.

 

Together, they form the chord of confusion.

 

Flaming figureheads fall

while the decrescendo leads the moment into a dull sob.

The siren of piccolos weaves in and out of the mayhem.

 

Rising and falling,

 

coming and going...

 

Help never fully coming from the lightness of the harp.

Its strings never to repair.

 

Suddenly, the violins and cellos burst into full.

Their intensity bringing, not help, only more madness.

They play as the devil would,

with demons on their side.

 

The harp tries to pluck its cries of hope,

never fully heard.

 

Basses, flutes, and clarinets erupt,

Intoxicated with the damned.

 

Clashing, climbing, cancerous, chords.

Discerning death of demons, delighting.

 

Rising.

 

RISING!

 

It is then that all stops,

the last note of its destruction yet to be sung.

 

The harp tries to play as the curtain falls.

Its strings wholly out of tune,

it sings only one chord,

Chaos.

Author notes

I wrote this after watching the movie Cloverfeild. I hope you like it.

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  • Wow, I really love this. I can picture everything you have written. I can almost hear the music as you have described. It's really great, it should have been the winner!

  • I liked it, just not a winner. Thanks for entering!


  • Peripatetic gold member
    December 7, 2008

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    I haven’t seen the film, but it sounds as if the sound track was used effectively, like the score to a tragic ballet. Such imagistic sound is the hallmark of some of the greatest performance art from ballet, to musicals, to dramatic productions of stage or screen. This poem delivers such images with vigorous choices of active verbs. It comes to its chaotic conclusion with the discordant cacophony poignantly underscored with the last valiant attempt of the harp to overcome the madness only to sound the last note of chaos.


  • hijuso
    July 14, 2008
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    Great

    This is great, nothing more.
    Is the film any good?


  • Emile
    June 10, 2008

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    Very Good

    I didn't like the movie but I like this poem. This is great, playing with words and concepts like a musical instrument charming the reader with your talent and wit. Your word choices and imaginative delivery make this a very interesting and colorful read. You have managed to capture the spirit of "music" letting us feel the moment.


  • Ronaline
    June 10, 2008

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    Wow. This is actully pretty amazing.
    I go to an art school, and by just reading this I can picture the school music program actully doing this.

    Wonderful write. Keep it up.

    And blessed be


  • Angelflower
    June 4, 2008

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    well this was very interesting indeed!
    I really liked this. The imagery was well done and very vivid.. And the flow was nice as well..
    You did a very good job.. Thank you very much for sharing. I wish you the best of luck..

    Angel


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    June 2, 2008

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    I see a new style emerging here. and I love the way you used all those Musical insterments The imergy was excellent the flow was good. the style is very intresting. thank you for sharing this and good Luck keep on writing.

  • Bob Fox
    June 2, 2008

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    Wow

    I have to say I had so many visions created by this excellent piece of poetry. It was like looking back into the haunts of history. Chaos reigns in mankind.

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