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Proposal Acceptance

Boxed jewels await hands
to wither life's treasure
       of living;

His voice calls
      beckoning
 I join
 but turning right
  from disaster
only leads to white.

Bells ring
  "wake up"
smell the roses
that bring forth
my scarlet cries;

Desiring flesh
leads to words
that mean nothing but
              "you'll die"

because spirits dressed
      in purity
to mask dirty deeds
only call on phones
screaming help.

       I knew
but knowing is nothing
as my foot steps followed

and I should have wore black;

 

  for I died that day.

                                                     

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Prompt: Marry Me
free verse

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  • Volfeng
    June 7, 2008
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    wow indeed....speech fails me

  • Nighttime angel
    June 4, 2008

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    WOW sweetie this poem is so filled with many raw emotions. excellent job with this poem. I love it..
    its dark, and sad..

    good luck in the contest

    I Love You
    mommy



  • Weltt
    June 4, 2008

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    well done with the prompt. love the twist you put on this. kinda take you on a bit of a crash of emotions. accelerating into happiness at first and then, bam! very much enjoyed!


  • buffsab99
    June 2, 2008

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    Sad and Beautiful

    This begins so happily and beautiful than so dark and sad. I have felt this way before. I can relate so deeply to this piece. Best of luck in this contest