Picking up pieces from a fallen star,
love crashed to earth from afar.
Shattered shards of glass are all that remain,
pain and sorrow upon me rain.
Devastation of a night dark and bleak,
gone in a flash the love I seek.
Searching for memories that I might keep,
now what I sow is what I reap.
Plunging downward your lovelight burned out,
teaching what pain is all about.
Your love and my heart now lay on the ground,
silent, broken nary a sound.
Sitting here weeping in such disbelief,
heartache overwhelms mid my grief.
Shadows forming, the night has turned gray,
love has died upon this day.
Author notes
Photo by Liek at www.deviantART.com
Picture Link: http://liek.deviantart.com/art/I-see-empty-people-64777426
In a list
A contest entry
- Liek Picture Inspired #1 by Manda Kathryn.
450 points, ended June 13, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Intensely dark this rips through the page and hits the heart making me scared love might die one day.
Stunning write!
♥
Thank you & Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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"weeping in such disbelief"
I liked this line and the references to light and dark in a battle - the ultimate battle is just that - who will join God in the battle of love
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Great Comment
Hello, Thank you for stopping by and reading. You comment was wonderful snd most appreciated.
Yes God's love will always win out in my heart. He gives us love so we may share and He is always there to pick up the pieces when it brings us sorrow. He is an amazing God. Take care. Have a great weekend!!
Bless You,
Sandy
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Exceptional.
Very well done,this is extreamly poignant. The words that you have written show a depth of love and saddness far beyond most peoples understanding. When reading this I get the sense of a spiritual love beyond words. The devastation of this kind of love being lost is; soul destroying. The poem is so beautiful in it's descriptive uses of the elements that you use. I sincerely hope that you get an award for this as it sure deserves one. Absolutely wonderful to read and I loved it.
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Great Comment
Thank you for stopping by and reading. I appreciate your nice comment. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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wow
this is an excellent poem. it really paints a vivid picture of someone who has lost someone dear to them. good job. Keep up the excellent work!! *Rose*Akari
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Lovely Comment
Thank you for the nice comment. You take care, Sandy
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What a verbal picture of heartbreak. My favorites are the metaphors used and the way they were used (Shattered shards of glass). Lots of emotion and feeling, and the rhyming is very good.
Good luck Sandy, and be blessed.
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Lovely Comment!!!
Thank you for the nice comment. I always enjoy your thoughtful comments. You have a wonderful day my friend.
Bless You,
Sandy
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This is so sad. I think I might change the first line to "picking up pieces from a {fallen} star" but the imagery and metaphores are wonderful. A very sad but lovely poem. I enjoyed reading it very much.
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Great Comment
Thank you for the nice comment. You take care, Sandy
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A soft but sorrowful beginning, the rhyme and rhythm subtle and inviting to the reader’s eyes. The sadness intensifies I think as the second verse takes hold of the heart and thrusts it into the spirit’s helical turns of power. Love, it can be such a cruel thing at moments, it ravishes souls and leaves them feeling so dejected in the beats of living life. A good finale, wrapping up the sorrow neatly with tears, emotional complexity’s silk ribbons.
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Lovely Comment
Good Morning, Thank you for the nice comment. I appreciate you stopping by. Take care, Sandy
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