Letters In The Sand

Today he’d show her.

He waited and watched

She was late…

he still waited,

watching as the tides turned,
encroaching on his world
eroding his courage,
his hope...

‘Marry me’,

was no more...

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Free Verse Writers....It's Time To Be Creative by Dalaney. 975 points, ended June 3, 2008, 18 entries
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arafura
June 2, 2008
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Love letters in the sand... how transient they are! Excellent write poet.
moonbumps
June 2, 2008

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Now I know what I'm up against!
Great write matching the prompt perfectly!
Good luck with this one!
Love Hilly xxx
Wayne Leon Learmond
June 2, 2008

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This is sad. Touches me deeply this one. Plays on the emotions really hard. Wonderful writing Sue. Methinks this could be a Gold, no doubt. Well done.

With
Dark
Love
Wayne Leon
x
SomeonesToySoldier
June 2, 2008
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Very good as well as sad. Its an excellent piece me Sue. You ever write anything that isnt?
z etoile
June 2, 2008
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Awe how beautiful I loved this piece!
Bad Bill
June 2, 2008
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This is handled with an assured and very effective touch, Sue. Well done, you.

Bill
Gold Hat
June 2, 2008

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I have been reading through the entries in this contest with great interest and admiration. I like this one very much.
kiwigirljacks
June 2, 2008

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Aww so sad!! He wrote in the sand and she never turned up!! Sigh... poor bloke.. send him my way lol

Wonderful Sue
cricketjeff
June 2, 2008

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Stood on the pier
watching the sea
wash away his dream
as his tears
washed away
his soul.