If a tear of crystal raindrop
Symbolized my love for you,
I’d dance under the grey threatening clouds
Embracing every heavenly drop
Until the end of forever
If a splat of bright colorful paint
Resembled the love I’d share with you,
I’d build you a gallery
Embedded with masterpieces
It was my unconditional love for you
That opened my soul to a new dimension
That opened my eyes to my fantasized world
And weaved reality’s presence into it
It was the passion I held on to tightly,
That made me dance with gleaming stars
And dwell in my fairytale dreams
A magical rose within my soul bloomed,
A rose that hid behind hideous scars
For it was you, my angel,
Who made miracles possible
My love for you will never fade
Because you’ll always be my baby
~
Author notes
Beauty of silence
A contest entry
- picture prompt yipeee!!! by LoveDeprived.
875 points, ended June 7, 2008, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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I loved every part of this.
But the end was my very favourite
"My love for you will never fade
Because you’ll always be my baby".
Stunning.
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Bravo
This was very romantic
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I loved this poem it was awsome and MAWAKs u
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Love inded makes miracles happen and is liie acoat of many colors!
Return the favor
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i loved this poem its so sweet
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It moved me!
I thought it was a greeat poem up until the last stanza, which compared to the rest of the poem was weak. Overall, a good read.
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Well done! Very imaginative and creative. You display talent beyond your years. We seem to have a synchronicity when it comes to writing heart-felt poems. Keep up the good work.
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wow that was awsome i can see how much love you have got for someone
rikki
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wow...so beautiful. i'm in awe, not quite sure what to say about it. i love the imagery...shows just how much this person means to you. there you have it...miracles are possible!
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this is a really good poem! really intersting and it flows brillantly1 keep writing!
thanks for commenting on my poem!
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I like this one, but forever doesnt end.
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its official...I like!! great imagery and feeling to this poem, I can feel your love to the guy/gal.
A true love poem, thanks for entering -
This whole poem seems overdone - it's like overkill in poetry form. There are so many words - most of them adjectives - that you used here that don't seem to contribute much to the overall effect of the poem except to make it a tad bit longer. Take out the descriptors and the remaining images are fairly commonplace metaphors for love. There's nothing that makes this poem outright awful but there's also nothing that makes it uncommonly good.
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Oh such a great choice of words put into a wonderful poem. You did a very very good job.
Keep writing
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wow this was amazing! Wonderful imagery and emotion. I loved this, it flowed so smoothly, and I could see how much you care for this person. Beautiful job! Thank you for this write.
Blessings,
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Wonderful imagery and metaphors!
This is an awesome piece
Favorite Part:
If a splat of bright colorful paint
Resembled the love I’d share with you,
I’d build you a gallery
Embedded with masterpieces
I have a lot of favorite parts but that is just one =)
Thanks for your entry
Good Luck!
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wow
Your poem describes one's love for another in so many diffrent ways on so many diffrent levels. Your usage of comparisons were excellent. I'm a little jealous I didn't write this.
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wow, this was such a great expression of love and care, it warms my heart to read this. thank you for sharing with me.
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wow!
I love the metaphors and how love was entwined so beautifully in this piece. The expressions are original and just drew me into this piece.
"I’d build you a gallery
Embedded with masterpieces"
I wish someone would do this for me too.
The secons last stanza was soft and fragile yet held a strong truth. beautiful!! I really loved how you added so many different things to make this a lovely, emotional and hopeful piece. You will definitely win something big. 
Good luck! (not really needed though)
loveees,
transit~
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OMG.
this is your best write i have ever read from you. you stole the competition; no other write in that contest will match up to yours.
this is really so beautiful. i especially like the gallery metaphor; it took my breath away, literally. (i couldn't breath when i read that)
this is so amazing~ gosh, inside the fun, bubbly girl, is really someone who can come up with such brilliant poetry to express yourself.
you WILL win this competition hands down, & if you don't, i'm gonna talk to this LOVEDEPRIVED guy and give him a little therapy talk
BEAUTIFUL
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AWW! Wee, thanks for that lovely comment man... and dude, chill! Gosh! >.< no need for any therapy talk... calm down! LOVE YOU SO MUCH!!!
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wowee you amaze me gal this is such an awesome piece. I love every single line!! && you know that is hard for me. a lovey dovey write but well written and beautiful...love it!!!!
&& you defintely are getting a lot of **attention** aren't ya? hehe I loved this.
teeheehee
you are so going to win this.
awesome work!!!!!!
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wow! wow! wow!, i hate you ranji! haha, you're so damn good, such imagery, the metaphors are cool, mindblowing, you've written this so well, that you make me cry lol, i mean this is so great, the words are so well used, i like all the words, how you twist the words to create a beautiful fantastic line, i can feel the passion used to write this write, a true poet,
A rose that hid behind hideous scars
For it was you, my angel,
Who made miracles possible
oh my god!, i like this a lot, pretty self-explanatory why?
"And weaved reality’s presence into it'
brilliant clever line, someone that could make you weave your fantasies into reality, "if i interpreted it right",
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