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Field Of Souls

A lost, dismembered soul,
amongst a field of lilies.
Chairs, tombstones of imaginary friends.
Forever leaving her, like the others.

A Storm is brewing,
inside her aching heart.
Trapped between real and fantasy.
Always told she's not good enough.
Just a lonesome girl,
wrongly tagged evil.

Close your eyes and dream little girl.
Cross to the other side,
it's time to go home now.
To a place where you'll be loved.
And run with the others,
in a field of roses.

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Picture Link: http://liek.deviantart.com/art/I-see-empty-people-64777426

I hope this makes sense. This piece is about a field where lost souls come before they cross to the other side. It tells the story of a girl before she makes the journey.

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  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    June 13, 2008

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    Beautifully captivating, I love the image of lost souls frolicking through the fields of lilies and roses.
    Charming

    ♥
    Thank you & Best of luck
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • m...c
    June 10, 2008

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    Very well done. Beautifully done. I like the words you used. Very nice write. Superb.

  • robwmcg2008
    June 4, 2008

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    I like it!

    I especially like lines 5-10. Great visuals there and so many people are labelled by others on their outward appearance or expression.

    Keep up the great work!