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A Canvas of Words

 
 

Against the glistening canvas,
behind the branches and leaves
where we shared our lips' whispers,
I found tonight a wreath of rain,
an alphabet of springtime lights
painting your name.

 

In each drop I see a burning candle,
a spell upon my yearning soul

the dream I do not like to return from
smitten with feelings I can't control.  

 

Leaves, small lyres with no strings
play and sing their crystal tunes
on the land, mannaz, engraved runes

and genuine magic of raindrop rings.

 

Pictures and words and sounds arise
between the skies and the wet ground,
and I... I  just wonder if it rains in paradise.

Author notes

Art: "Courtyard in Venecia" by Alan Blaustein
http://allpoetry.com/images/ext/Contest/2407/935.jpg?1212461881

I write my own style, free verses combined with rhyme, not very often used by other poets, but I like it very much.

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  • Dragonbabyx3
    December 7, 2008

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    This is a very soft and beautiful piece, the words slowly drifted through my mind, letting me see, hear, and taste each one. Beautiful write! Thankyou for entering my contest, and Good Luck!


  • rosie4491
    July 21, 2008

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    Wow. just.. wow. This is exactly what I'm looking for! Thank you so much for this wonderful write. and of course BEST of luck in my contest.

    Keep it up.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    June 5, 2008

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    Humm..amazing..even the thought itself is a wonder..and the treatment flow and the structure too are the wonders of this piece...I appreciate ..thanks for sharing it...


  • Kiran silver member
    June 4, 2008

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    One of the most wonderful poems I have read! Stunning in language and imagery this was a pure pleasure to read. I loved this.


  • poetic-enigma21
    June 3, 2008

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    wow, wonder how you come up with such beautiful pieces, each line is so beautiful in its own way, am your fan


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 3, 2008

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    Lovely poetry, Sonja. Your voice is always so soft and tender. Liked the way you've combine rhyme and freeverse here... not many that can pull it off as well as you did. Congrats on your well-deserved trophy, and keep writing like this.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Soul2b
    June 3, 2008

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    Wow this was beautifully written I love this poem so much. It was soothing and calm and relaxing and so sweet. I love this


  • Night Hope gold member
    June 2, 2008

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    "Pictures and words and sounds arise
    between the skies and the wet ground,
    and I... I just wonder if it rains in paradise."

    I believe it must, Sonja. How else could such beautiful gardens grow? Where else could the rainbows form, the butterflies sing? This is a very tender & loving piece, my Friend. Thank you for entering. Good luck in the contest. Wanda


    • Sonja
      June 2, 2008
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      Thanks a lot for this nice shiny trophy. I am so glad that in my poetry and my poetical question you know to read the secret of rainbows and butterflies. Of course it must rains... but there we do not need umbrellas, it rains a genuine poetry only.
      ~Sonja~


  • VoltaicHypnosis gold member
    June 2, 2008

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    !!!!!

    Oh this was simply gorgeous! This is so beautiful - I think it rains in paradise, but it wont freeze you lol... the images, and the way you played with different forms... it actually works well. Beautiful - thanks for the read!!


  • Wandika gold member
    June 2, 2008

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    So beautiful my friend

    I have been gone for a while and when I return I read this beautiful poem you have written. I hope the year is treating you well.

    Jim


  • tara wilson gold member
    June 2, 2008

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    "I found tonight a wreath of rain,
    an alphabet of springtime lights
    painting your name."

    This is so gorgeous - I can feel being there..you paint your imagery perfectly


  • jasminerose
    June 2, 2008

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    Well in comment to your authors notes, I love your style very much!! Your words capture the heart and send beauty into the soul. Your love poetry is that of a romantic, sharing the wonders and joy of all it gives...
    Beautiful my friend, just beautiful!
    All my best to you in the contest!
    Linda

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