Like wind that whispers on eagles wings
soaring higher into celestial spheres
touching, arousing, awakening, before
fading in the vastness of heaven's firmaments
echos’ confirmation of clandestine love
can you hear it in heartbeats of blue seas
as they gently lap upon sandy shores
repeatedly, whispering
she loves you
It is written on every blade of grass
caressed by summer’s gentle breeze
grasping, yearning, aching, before
blown into heaven's immensity
echos’ confirmation of clandestine love
can you hear it in brilliance of twilight's stars
as they softly twinkle
repeatedly, whispering
she loves you
Like mighty mountains that rise
from earth’s deepest depths
so is her love
from unfathomable recesses of her soul
faithful as morning’s golden sun
ascending, burning, inflaming
so is her love
steadfast in desolation's cold
for only her heart knows
she loves you
Author notes
Option 15 and 4
A contest entry
- Between the Shadow and the Soul by Mad Moon.
550 points, ended June 19, 2008, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Release Me by sensualbutterfly.
300 points, ended July 28, 2008, 79 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~MY ONE YEAR ANNIVERSARY~ Celebrate With Me by Still Standing.
850 points, ended October 29, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I love the repetition. You are one outstanding poet and I'd like to read more. Good luck.
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Great. I can see why you directed me to this one! I agree with TheGreatestLove, the way you ended each stanza with "she loves you" is just great, reinforcing the message and it's just great! It just breathes imagery and emotion and I love the language choices you've made. I can see why all the other commentators have liked it! It's a great piece!
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how you ended each stanza with the phrase "she loves you"
this was really sweet; it sent warm tingles down my spine.
thanks for sharing this and all the best
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Love your name here!
Awesome job. Keep up the great work and keep writing great pieces like this one!!! You have enough talent for probably all of us here at Allpoetry! Truly a great write. Such an astoudning and amazing job. If you feel like it, check out my poems and feel free to comment them! Be honest, please! Thanks so much for sharing this piece with all of us here at Allpoetry!
Oh, I just started a new contest! Please take a second to view it and try your hand at it if you wish!
Here is the link to my new contest! http://allpoetry.com/contest/2431805
Thanks so much! Have an awesome day!
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very powerful like the intense emotion of love...beautiful expressions made the poem all the more lovely..
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thank you, I really appreciate you stopping by and commenting, thank you very much.
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I love that you have everything whispering her love, but in the end it is so true, only they know. Beautiful piece, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
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whisper
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you've written such a great poem, it has a lot of depth
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i love the poem you have created here. so so beautiful. i am a hopeless romantic, so i fall for these types of poems so very easily. great great writing. loved it so much. what was your inspiration?
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This was gorgeous. Romantic, sad, and has a beautiful amount of imagery...this is pretty much close to perfect as perfect gets.
I'm a sucker for love poetry with a nature theme. It's my favorite.
Great Job and Congrats on the trophies.
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Thank you, I'm glad you like it, and thank you for the wonderful comment, makes the heart smile.
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Humm..this is indeed a wonderful thought of her love and your poetry my friend...I love it..and my thanks for such a wonderful piece...
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Normally a poem so romantic, full of metaphors and multi-syllable words, only serves to make me gag with exaggerated and unrealistic emotion.
But this is perfect. Detailed and intricate enough to make it interesting, "simply said" enough that it's "real".
If any of that makes sense? lol
Basically I really like it.
=> Jess
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Amazing use of metaphors! Very well written. Very emotional. Thank you for your entry
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steadfast in desolation's cold for only her heart knows she loves you
if only she could allow herself to tell him. you wrote this so very well and left me feeling sorrow for this sad and lonely girl. thank you for sharing this with me tonight and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. congratulations on the honorable winner you have earned in this contest. viyanna rosemarie
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so is her love
steadfast in desolation's cold
for only her heart knows
she loves you
this is such a sad state to be in. hopefully, one day, the girl will find the courage and strength to tell him how she feels. congratulations on the honorable winner and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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The metaphors in this are wonderful! It reads smoothly, and has the perfect pace to it. Beautiful imagery, abundant emotion... Just a beautifully written piece! Thanks so much for this fabulous addition, and Good Luck!!
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Oh don't we all love the feeling of love, and being loved. The first stanza had good description of what a girl feels when she is in love. It's truly heartbreaking that this guy can't see she loves him. I love the last 2 lines which happens to be the title. It's a very wonderful write. Can't wait to read more.
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Thank you for the wonderful comment and for taking the time to read my poem. I'm glad you liked it.
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