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muderer's mind

I went to sleep and in my head
I pulled the trigger; bang! bang! your dead.

Opened eyes and with a smile
havent seen my 'friends' in a while.

My knife, My gun,
it's time for fun.....

oh what joy! to take a life
a son, a man, a girl, a wife.

so now my viscious "friends"
it's time for us to kill again

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  • Bruce silver member
    January 10

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    Disturbing, but good! LOL I noticed a couple of typos: "your" for "you're" - your are contraction. need apostrophe in "haven't". However these are minor matters, and this is an original and well constructed poem. Cheers!


  • Baahltres
    November 11, 2008

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    Wow, this was short and sweet. It even sounds happy, made me almost want to giggle. It sounds like something you might see in a horror film, a person cleaning their gun, casually reciting poems...

    Well written! :hugs:

    Baahltres
    ~.~Yvonne~.~


  • Man of Harlech silver member
    June 3, 2008

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    I cannot help but react with concern. You have given a rare glimpse of the psycopath's thoughts. I am keeping you on my favorite's list because I admire your courage.