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exceeded

Switched temperatures,
        whirling electric
            differences

Sizzling,
with  ti
            pp
                ing
    handle,


wooden tongue
burned

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  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    June 1, 2008
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    a truly creative piece here... x


  • XxESPNCHICKxX
    June 1, 2008

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    are u seriously 11...u have got to be kidding me this is really good...u are going to be a pro before ur 20...this is pretty good..


  • notorious
    June 1, 2008
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    Seriously interesting...

    The first stanza is the epitome of unique--truly.

    "wooden tongue"
    Great phrase...and unique use of the word 'wooden' I might add.

    Are you genuinely 11? This is very well-written...not that age should matter...you clearly have a brilliant mind, 11 or not..