Let's think about the children,
as pro lifers often cry:
the children they'd force to be born
their God forbid a fetus die.
When lots more children no one wants
fill up our overcrowded world,
will those who say they must be born
look after all those boys and girls?
We number far too many now,
the earth is straining with our weight
by adding to our poorest mouths
you're just sealing the planet's fate.
Now think about the single mum
nowhere to turn, 'cause no one cares.
She can't afford another kid,
so "trips" and tumbles down the stairs
And now some backstreet criminals
have a new service to supply.
Where burly men will drug you up
and snake a hanger up your thigh.
And if potential life is life
then what excludes the eggs and sperm?
will condoms be the next for bans?
has masturbation served it term?
So if you say that you're pro life
I want you to think very hard,
Leave doctors and young girls alone
Do your blockade at the graveyard
Author notes
Credit to the late great Bill Hicks for the graveyard joke in the final stanza, which I adapted for the poem. I don't think abortion is murder, and if the poem or my opinion offends you, then you're too sensitive. Feel free to abuse me if you want though, I find it funny. I notice a strongly anti-abortion element in this contest (not pro-life, because potential life isn't life. thanks)
A contest entry
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I loved this poem. It hits on some major points of argument for both sides. The rhyming was dead on and the words chosen really make you think. It comes off a bit intolerant for for people of different beliefs. But it's your poem, so it's perfectly fine.
This thing that bugs me the most, and I was sad not to see written about is the people that say I'm prolife except in these certain cases...
'cause that's pretty much making them a bigger "murderer" than us prochoicers are. They recognize it as a baby and they are saying some babies can live and others can't. x
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Pro-Choice!
I especially loved your use of the quote at the end, and also this stanza:
"And now some backstreet criminals
have a new service to supply.
Where burly men will drug you up
and snake a hanger up your thigh."
The 'your' makes it very personal to me as a woman. That whole process makes me shudder, disgusting.
Well done, and thank you for getting our opinion across so well!
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good poem thanx for entering
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All that I can truly say is that what if one had said that the earth was being over-populated when your mother and father decided to go thru with you? what if someone had said that this earth was over-populated and we were to kill half our species and half of all the other living creatures upon here...I can not judge you for your opinion because that is all it is. All I can say is that we all must look at things from all angles, rather or not we believe in God...Life is life with or without it's first breath. It is murder of two lives when you kill a pregnant woman, no matter how many months she is along. So, why are we charged with a murder of two, if there is a belief that life takes flight at the first breath?
That is something to think about!
HAve a great day.
Good Bless.
Thank you for your opinoin...it is respected.
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I don't agree with this poem at all, but I respect your opinion and your ability to professionally get your opinion across. The first stanza felt a little awkward, but everything else flowed perfectly. The rhyming was also very well done.
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hmm..you're the only person that i know of that has ever mentioned the topic of how we are overpopulating and such..i totally agree with you to a certain extent.. you state your argument very well and leaves the person reading thinking..well me anyhow..my favorite lines were,
"So if you say that you're pro life
I want you to think very hard,
Leave doctors and young girls alone
Do your blockade at the graveyard"
Thank You For Entering And Good Luck
~*ForeverLastingComa aka Leesha*~ -
Your write does make one think. I myself am pro-life in most cases. However, in the cases of rape or medical necessity, I could understand one having an abortion. When abortion is used as a birth control, it does tend to get to me. Thanks so much for posting your write on such an important and controversial subject. Best of luck to you in the contest.
Crystal
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EXACTLY!!!
I really enjoyed your poem and feel exactly the same way. It's not life until it takes a breath, that's how I feel. And anyways, why does the government get a say in MY body anyway?! That's ridiculous. A woman should have the choice, just as she has the choice to cut her hair or wear whatever she wants. If people want to judge, okay, but it's not their decision to live with. I ranted a little...sorry...anyways, I liked that you were bold and confident in what you said on such a controversial subject. Great job
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Hmmm...thought provoking
I am always interested in the opinion of others & I've now read this a couple times, trying to formulate a comment. My personal stance is that a woman should have the right to decide but that abortion has become a method of birth control, which makes me ill to think about. I must give credit where due - this certainly brings a different aspect to an old argument.
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Thanks a lot for that well thought out comment. I understand your point about abortion being used as a method of birth control, while I'm strongly pro-choice, I wouldn't want the poem to imply that abortion isn't a massive decision that shouldn't ever be taken lightly. I may still try and edit the poem slightly to that end - it is still a work in progress in my head, it's just aqquired a new stanza.
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No, please don't misunderstand my point - I didn't mean to imply that abortion is not a massive decision!! I have been in those shoes and they are an awful fit. I live with my decisions on a daily basis (no, I didn't have an abortion but ended up losing my child anyway) and the choices I made many years ago still shape me as a person.
I respect your ability to state an opinion & write about it as emotionally & strongly without being preachy. I will keep an eye on this one - I'd like to see the finished product! Take care!! -
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I wasn't misunderstanding your point, I didn't think that's what you thought at all. I was merely concerned that the poem might imply that was what I thought, which I don't.
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Ah! Good. My thoughts are a bit scattered right now & wanted to be certain I was clear in my comment. What a mess! Sorry about that! *s*
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i love Bill Hicks, I love that theory and I LOVE this poem, short and sweet. It gets th point across. And i like the bit where you say is condoms and wanking going to get done next. Excellent.
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Thanks a lot, it's nice to hear from another fan of Hicks, I'm frequently shocked and appalled at how few people have even heard of him.
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