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Best Friends Forever

You replaced she who tore me
Apart. Removed my rusted
Shackles that screamed in protest.
Free. I touched your glowing face.

New, shining, silver shackles,
So much heavier than those
I once wore. Why? I did not ask.
I didn't ask. But did I want,
You ask. I did not want it
I DID NOT WANT IT but god,
It is so easy to lie
When you're not speaking. It's just
So damn easy to look you
In the eye and spout filth, trash,
That never fails to enchant.
You believe so easily.

Christmas child, this child of lies.
It is the name that I didn't choose.
How could I not become it?
It is not my fault, because
I never faltered, not once.

I tear at the sparkling chains,
I roar, my humanity
Flees, so quick. I will be free.
I will fight and I WILL NOT LOSE.
You can't kill me. You could not
Even wear me out or down.
Were you hoping to, my spite?
Did you plan to all along?

Enraged, more powerful than
I have ever been before,
Stretch the unyielding metal
And I strike my best blow yet.



You lie still on the floor in obsidian chains, bleeding, exhausted in your attempts to love me, and I finally know what I have done.
I lie still beside you on the floor, remembering she who you vanquished for me, and, as I feel you breathe on my lips, I wish you'd never met me.

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This was a freewrite that came out just right. My "best friend" was always making me feel pathetic. She was bad for me, and my boyfriend helped. Then, just because I couldn't stop loving him, I felt betrayed.
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  • Dead Lover
    June 2, 2008
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    One Word, WOW!!!

    I dont know how you do it, but somehow you manage to stir my blood, and make my tears flow from deep within. Maybe it's because I greatly care about you, or maybe its because I have been there as well. I love your reference to these "shining chains" they really were awesome imagery! It was as if I was watching the story unfold before my eyes, as if I was living it from your prospective. I also loved how you ended the poem "I lie still beside you on the floor, remembering she who you vanquished for me, and, as I feel you breathe on my lips, I wish you'd never met me." That was in my eyes a perfect ending for this poem. It was really deep, and without a shadow of a doubt held with the depth of the rest of the poem. In my opinion the content is not too cliched for the message to not matter. Your message is strong in this poem, and the content in this poem only supports that message. I know you would kill me if I didn't point this out so I am going to tell you in line 7 "ocne" should be "once." That was the only minor flaw I found in the poem. Even though this poem left me in tears, I must say to you that I love this poem. Great write baby sister! If you ever need to talk you know where to find me, and I will do anything in my power to help you out. I promise I will never do this to you.
    Love you with
    all my heart
    Your big bro,
    ~Adam


    • Kikai Ni
      June 3, 2008
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      I wanted it to end bitterly, because that's how I felt when I finally saw what I was doing to him. Some lover I turned out to be.
      o.o' Oh, so it is. What would I do without you?
      I know you won't. You always lift my spirits.
      Your baby sister

      • Dead Lover
        June 3, 2008

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        I am glad that I am able to help you in some way, form or fashion. You mean the world to me, and it makes me happy to see that I am of some use to you. I love you baby sister
        <3


  • Blackwinged Angel
    June 2, 2008

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    ...

    I... You left me in tears, I can feel the pain of having someone like that in your life... This was my favorite part "New, shining, silver shackles,
    So much heavier than those
    I ocne wore. Why? I did not ask.
    I didn't ask. But did I want,
    You ask. I did not want it
    I DID NOT WANT IT but god,
    It is so easy to lie"

    I guess because I related it to what I am going through right now... I wouldn't change a thing even if someone asked me too... Free writes are personal, and shouldn't be changed in my opinion... Awsome write, I would like to talk with you about it some time. ^-^


    • Kikai Ni
      June 3, 2008
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      Anytime you have the time, I'm all ears.
      It is a very personal work, but I think many people can relate to it.

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