thanks to you
my eyes have opened
hope was found
and this feeling i long forgotten
has returned
true love was it not
but you where already taken
so much sorrow so much anguish
you knew how i felt about you
a burden in your life was i?
i dont care i still love you
no matter what choice you make
i will still be behind you
you may not know
but every time we are together
i feel invincible
thanks to you my
eyes have opened
still not sure what to do
but.....
what happened
our friendship is slipping
every time i talk to you
you block yourself away
why?
what have i done wrong?
why cant you just talk to me
you walk past me as if we never knew each other
no blade can get rid of these feelings
back in my shell i went
it seems my eyes are closing
once again...
A contest entry
- 5 OPTION -- Prewrites allowed by Florida Sunshine.
525 points, ended July 29, 2008, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Well this is the kind of stuff me and my friend are going through its really hurtful #4
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This actually brought tears to my eyes- it is that good. If it were my contest you would have the gold.
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thank you!
and glad u like
it
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It is so hard to have love for someone-- but, not be loved. I know this feeling. It's a painful hurt. I've cried many tears. But, looking back -- I'm glad they broke my heart and stop 'playing' me, because I can look for the one who will 'really' love me and will allow me to love them. The way it should be.
Nice job in conveying the emotions behind this, anyone who has been through this type of experiance would understand your message.
Thanks for entering the contest -- However, I need you to put the option you've chosen to enter this under. I'm guessing 4. Just the number will be enough, the option must be on there by the time I judge otherwise I won't know which for sure you want--officially.
Best of luck to you,
Florida Sunshine
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uhmmmm
idk
where to put number 4
like tht one tht gives more information?
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Listen are you sure this is for kids?Coz u know my contest is for kids?
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Well written and versed and your emotions come to the forefront in this composition--Well Done!!
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thnxs
so much
but ya i did try really
hard so im glad u and others
like it
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Thanks for the entry! There's a mistake in there you might want to fix though.
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I like this. alot. so frigging good
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thnxs
worked really hard
on this piece
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thanks for entering
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I love this poem and I'm so so sorry that your in pain. I wish you good luck. remember. God does love you.
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thnxs
just wish things
would really
get better
but im still hoping
8p
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this is a good poem and you wrote it about the friend you just got in a fight with..........but it is still good
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8D
thnxs
i usaly always
show her my new poems
i rite but i never did
show her this one
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i love it this poem it has got to be one of the best i have read on this website two thumbs up ^_^
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o-o
really
or are u just being
nice
well this poem is to
my friend mandi
where in a fight right
now
so i wrote this
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