My tears fell like the rain
As I sat there waiting for him on the bench on the corner
My eyes kept looking up in hope
But my heart knew the sad truth
He was not coming
My dress stuck to my legs
My hair was plastered to my forehead
The ring he had given me sparkled in the dim street light
The words engraven into it meant nothing but lies now
They said, "I will always love you"
I held my umbrella loosely in my hand
My red nails grasped the curved handle
The moon was my only comfort
As I waited for a revalation
A revalation that would only bring me grief
I thought of all of the times we had together
All the moments I had wished would never end
All of the smiles we had exchanged
All of the love we had shared
All of the lies he had told
Now I have nothing but his hundreds of lies
To haunt my every thought
As the tears drizzled down my cheeks
As my heart weeped in sorrow
As my love washed away
The rain eventually passed
And it took every care I had for him with it
I put my umbrella away
As sunshine shone, my tears dried up
And I walked away from the bench on the corner
Author notes
Option five
A contest entry
- Variety by luna-midnight.
1000 points, ended June 14, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dazzle Me! by Shahrazad.
650 points, ended July 5, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn your Green Trophies into Bronze, Silver or Gold (2) by FloridaGatorQueen.
600 points, ended July 17, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is an awesome poem. I hate when the guy a person loves turns out to be a jerk. My ex Greg turned out like a jerk. Anyways, I enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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thanks for the comment. i really appreciate it when others comment on my poetry, and i love it even more when they say they love it. i'm sorry about your bad relationship with greg.
<3 shannon
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awwwww- this was really good! the first two stanzas were especially prominent to me because of the attention to detail and using concrete images to describe the abstract
Thanks for the wonderful read. I enjoyed
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wow. this was ABSOULTELY beautiful. I just loved it! You are an amazing writer/ poet!
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well you certainly told the tale of tthat picture used in the contest. Lots of imagery in this and the emotion is evident. I wuld edit out a bit of the filler words in this to help it flow a bit better as for me anyways i stuck in spots I did enjoy the read and good luck in the contest
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great description of the pic. you put alot fo emotion into it.
thanks for entering and take care
stephanie
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