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Darkness Covers Me

Darkness surrounds me like a black blanket,
it covers me like an eclipse, e....t...c...h....i...n....g... closer,
and every time i look its getting darker,
and death has made such a marker,
unto me, a wish nobody else can see,
every time i shut my eyes,
everything around me dies, and c
                                                  r
                                                         i
                                                                e
                                                                      s,

i try to /c.../a.../L.../L..../ out, to scream in despair,
but every time i do its a whisper,
so many c-u-t-s i do bare,
if i sleep, i sleep to d.r.e.a.m,
to dream up a nightmare that cuts inro my self esteem,
lower and lower I'm
          P
         R
 R 
           L
    L  
             I
           G

sinking d  e e  p  e  r,
cascading, run-d  o
                          w   n
everything is turning colour to black around,
finally I'm h.i.t.t.i.n.g the ground...

I'm losing hope, I'm dying inside,
I'm looking at you now, so w...i....d....e... eyed,
scream at you, to save my soul,
or at least keep me u
                            n
                             d
                               e
                                r
control,
if you wont do that at least let me die,
stop, start, let it all fall
a/p/a/r/t,
once you have lost hope, lost my heart,
then watch me rip it apart,
run the knife along my [wrists],
hold nothing back, no resists,
a walking nothing its what they told you, you are,
this is nothing so bizarre,

(bleed crimson passion)
losing all compassion,
bleed yourself dry,
so i can no longer cry..

my last words will be

"I'm sorry I'm such a mistake"

Author notes

just something i came up with

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  • movedon
    June 24, 2008

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    Like a rollar coaster! Pictures are very cute! Well dserving for the GT!

    Mylee


  • SarahEatsAirplane
    June 16, 2008

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    this is really intense, you build the suspense so high.

    bookmarked and i absolutely have fallen in love with this.

    congrats on you trophies. you definitely deserved them.


  • PrettyxoxPoison
    June 10, 2008

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    Wow...
    This is beautiful!
    It had wonderful flow
    I don't think I took a breath the entire time
    That's quite a while
    I love the way you wrote it
    It looks like you put a lot of time into this.
    I would point out my favorite part
    But I don't think I can!
    This was just fantastic.
    Thank you for entering my contest!
    Good luck!
    ♥[Katee]♥


  • Zenda-Lokki silver member
    June 7, 2008

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    Quite obviously by the response you have received and the love we all have for you, you are not a mistake at all babes x
    Love the way you wrote this hun, very creative as always.
    ily xx

  • piccola silver member
    June 3, 2008
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    very creative. I like the bg too. thank you for the entry.


  • VoltaicHypnosis gold member
    June 3, 2008

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    ooh random.... And cool as


  • Nothing But No
    June 2, 2008

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    Your poetry is indeed deeply moving, you seem to tell a story I know all too well. Perhaps we've lived parallel lives. If so, I'm sorry you've had to experience these things. All my best
    -Rodwen


  • X ace of spades X
    June 2, 2008

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    tears are welling up inside me, yet they do not fall.

    everything around me is turning so small

    compared to your poem, all of mine combined are worthless.
    i envy your talent to make this.

    my love goes out to you


  • GypsyEyes
    June 2, 2008

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    your poetry is always moving! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox


  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    June 2, 2008

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    Baby you are frar from a mistake. You are wonderful, beautiful woman with much to give to us all. This was a great poem although the odd way of doing the fonts made it hard to read for me. Other then t hat I LOVED it


  • Suicidal Werewolf4U
    June 1, 2008
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    Oh kewl!

    I love it!
    It is so awesome!


  • demonic66
    June 1, 2008
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    i love this

  • DarkRomantic113
    June 1, 2008

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    Oh this was simply breath taking. I could feel the emotion behind it. I'm sorry you feel this way, hun. You deserve some happiness.


  • Yy13
    June 1, 2008

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    Your last words should be "I'm sorry I'm such a mistake, but let me write one more poem like this before I go!" I like the pictures of the happy couples in juxtaposition.


  • Angelflower
    June 1, 2008

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    Your not a mistake.. and you never will be.. Your such a beautiful person..
    And you did a wonderful job expressing so much here...
    I also love the style you wrote this in, it really helps bring the emotions and reality of it to the fore.. you did a wonderful job..
    love you..

    Angel

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