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Until That September

Her heart pulses
emanating a invisible sirens song
            

she waits... 
at times impatiently. 
                    

Settling occasionally,
but never releasing 
completely.

~

Until that 
September,
when he who walked the rhythm
                    
to her melody...
intruded decadently, 

trapping wondering gaze.

~

They dance like swans,

upon a still pond. 
       

Knowing,

yet silent.

While their internal beat 
accelerates
   

and serenades...

the enchanting sway,
that neither

can find words 
                to explain~

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  • Judith Chandler
    August 8, 2008
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    "they dance like swans". Nice.


  • kishi-tenshi
    August 7, 2008
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    DELIGHTFULLY EXCELLENT

    no words could describe how beautifully this poem was written.

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    June 21, 2008
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    Thank you for your lovely entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • poppa
    June 19, 2008

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    Wow .....this just made me sigh....beautiful soft write , loved it ..

    "when he who walked the rhythm
    to her melody...
    intruded decadently"

    fantastic lines ...


  • Swan song gold member
    June 14, 2008

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    This is simply a stunning and wonderfully written poem it was spot on and sigh gave me goose bumps lol


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    June 9, 2008

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    Such beauty In every line.
    I adore your poetry
    You create such wonderful imagery
    Many blessings
    ~A~


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    June 9, 2008

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    Words that create a atmosphere of serenity and beauty...soft and dreamy. Very best of luck in the contest!


  • penman gold member
    June 6, 2008
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    Excellent

    Terrific creation for the theme. best of luck in the contest.


  • thepoetssoul
    June 3, 2008

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    This is such a beautiful piece of poetry,filled with wonderful imagerySplendidly done indeed

    Tony


  • Desire gold member
    June 3, 2008

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    Ooooooooooooooh~

    Trips over two left feet
    Now this is a Beauty~
    Gosh...I wish I could write like this...
    -kicks cyber dirt- (pouts)

    Dang~ Another piece to swoon the Heart
    Love it Hot Momma!!
    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet One
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Rhyming from Rehab
    June 2, 2008
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    oh my this was so sensually sweet! best to you in the contest


  • tara wilson gold member
    June 2, 2008

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    "
    the enchanting sway,
    that neither

    can find words
    to explain~ "

    beautiful - I love that 'sway' of love


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    June 2, 2008

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    Aww this is so beautiful it brought a wee tear to my eye!! Stunning write and I just love how you brought the swans into it as they mate for life... and the ending is so true... sometimes words cannot explain the feeling...

    Gorgeous!

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    June 1, 2008

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    Oh Gosh
    I love this. I miss you
    Beautiful

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