I...
fell...
hard...
And it's taking
so long...
for me to hit the ground.
After such a flip
I can't seem to get
back down to earth
and it makes me sick.
I stumbled and I tripped.
The fabric
of my whole world
being shred and ripped.
Woah...
over and over
and over again
these heartache troubles
won't seem to end.
And now...
I can't
even find lost friends...
What a world
I am in.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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*wow*
so much feeling you put into your piece!!falling is never fun, weather its physically or emotional;-( it made me take a second look at the world and of all the terror. you put this piece together very well:-) i might look at more of your poetry if you don't mind:-)
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I love this poem. It's very different (format wise) from what I normally read and a beautiful way of describing the topic.
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I really like it "i stumbled and i tripped. the fabric of my whole world being shred and ripped." i really like that part.
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