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Werewolf Tag

Running through the woods on a dark a stormy night.
The clouds try and nearly succeed to cover the full moon.
A chilling sound breaks through the almost silent night.
A howl follows close behind me.
I run faster than I thought possible.
It is not enough for I hear it coming closer.
I am running out of breath and losing strength fast.
I stop to catch my breath and to face the creature alone.
The creature comes charging at me until I put my hand up.
The creature shoves its nose into my stomach and then runs off into the night as I fall to the ground.
I get off the ground laughing and yell to the wind.
Tag I’m it and now I’m coming to get you.
The changes come as I begin running.
A howl breaks through the almost silent night.

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  • OurxBeginning
    October 13

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    I think this is a nice job at fantasy. The imagery really replayed inside my mind. A short piece but not lacking. Well done and thanks for entering.


  • pain is love.
    June 12

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    Wow fantastic entry I love the flow. I love how in the begining it seems like you are scared and then it turns to fun and games. This is an amazing entry. Thank you!


  • Jaffa-
    December 8, 2008

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    That was amazing. I really thought that the character was going to die and then it was just like no he's not. That was awesome well done and nice twist. well done and good luck in the contests.


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    November 9, 2008
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    I could feel my heart racing as I “ran” through this with you. In my head though you’ve noted a werewolf I got the image of this huge black creature with yellow eyes and drool. I don’t know why it just popped in my head LOL I love the fun twist of it being a game of tag. Really puts the life into Halloween festivities. Very nicely done!


  • amanda vampiress
    September 7, 2008

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    Very well written! I see some imagery and lots of suspense! It felt as if i was there running along side playing in the game along with them. Keep up the good work, I really enjoyed reading this.


  • CrystalFlower
    August 19, 2008
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    Very nice, good luck.


  • InfiniteCaitlin
    June 8, 2008

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    Mmm this was a very interesting take on the option. Very unique and was refreshing to read. I think you could have worked on making it flow together more because each line kind of ends abrubtly.


  • Origami Shapes
    June 1, 2008

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    A good eerie atmosphere set with the opening line, one knows one is in for a dark treat with words from this as well as from the poem’s title. I like the chase of the night, fast feet hitting hard ground as fear stalks the heart’s rhythm, all the while the moon smiles brightness. The battle for breath bring a battle for life, death wants its moment. I like the humour inserted here with the creature knocks you over and you get up laughing which shows that you are a friend of it not a victim. A good ending, I was not expecting that at all.

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