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Shadows

Missing image
Image Credit: Vincent van Gogh,
Montmartre Near the Upper Mill,
  winter 1886-1887 (Paris)


Theo would have disliked
the crooked lines,

leaning as if his head skewed could change the image
    but light filters, causing shadows
          and my eyes are drawn to them

reflecting the sun
whose blaze grasps to part clouds
and break free.



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  • Sprite silver member
    June 18, 2008
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    Reread today.


  • myron silver member
    June 17, 2008

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    lovely

    hi Pamela - this is a lovely little poem complete with vivid , interesting images. very nice.

    i hope this does well in the contest.

    best wishes,
    myron.


  • NeonRose
    June 14, 2008
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    Wonderful write! The first line just grabs me and pulls me in! Good luck in the contest!

  • Sprite silver member
    June 14, 2008
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    Theo never did understand his brother, but loved the impact of his paintings and the man himself. I have always felt that what we see on the canvas IS Van Gogh.

    The crooked thinking, unusual view of nature and thick brush strokes of slathered paint are all indicative of his unrelenting passion.

    I think you capture that here in very few words. The sun seems to represent happiness trying to escape the confusion of Vincent's mind. Your poem is delicately intricate, like lace.

    Sorry about the first read of mine. Wine was involved and THAT will not happen again!

    Thanks for entering. ~ Joyce


  • ckwriter69
    June 13, 2008
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    very interesting and well done write. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.


  • pastiche
    June 12, 2008

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    Match Point!

    You've caught the unnerving mood of the painting just right here, both in your words and the layout - which is so skilful: the reader's eyes cannot help but be slowly drawn away from the straight lines of left alignment! - "as if his head skewed could change the image".
    "grasps to part clouds" is a forceful description of the curious effect that sometimes occurs when light manages to break through clouds during thunderstorms or on heavily overcast days.
    Tight and succinct, the poem meets the picture and matches the prompt exactly! And I mean: exactly!
    Good luck in the contest,
    p


  • thepoetssoul
    June 4, 2008

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    What a beautiful piece of art to write to.VanGogh brings such beauty and life to these not so lively colors.And your poem to this piece is wonderfully creativeTruly a nice fit that demands the reader's attentionBest of wishes to you.

    Tony


  • simpliciti
    June 2, 2008

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    I like this one

    those opening lines pulled me right in...well done piece here and works so well with the mood! All the best to you!


  • delightfulmess silver member
    June 1, 2008

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    Beautifully done. Reminding me of my father.
    He would always notice the slightest crook in any contruction. LOL Well done Thank you for the trip down memory lane.


    Delila


  • Amera gold member
    June 1, 2008

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    Beautifully composed! I think you have not only captured the heart of the artist but also the art lover. Bravo!

    Love,
    Amera♥

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