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How Do I Go On

I listen to the rattle of his lungs and wonder if today will be the day he leaves me here and travels far above.

Vibrations ever increasing.

I feel the whoosh of death.

The beginning of the journey beyond all space and time.

I can feel the imbalance and confusion his body feels as he hangs it away.

His soul is all encompassed and has no need for earthly cloak.

Our souls are so connected; how will I journey alone.

My heart it hurts and spreads throughout my body.

My soul rejoices knowing soon he will be healed.

I'm torn into, what do I pray; body or release of soul.

I feel the pressure mounting and strain to bring it down.

All hope and fears within by being lies.

Knowing that what I feel is only half of his.

I must be strong and journey on this path.

To love and comfort all his days.

And pray each night that I awake to say goodbye before he crosses over. 

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  • SoundsOfSilence
    April 5
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    Awe...

    Damn.
    This is touching.
    Very very emotional.

    I love it...

  • Majija
    March 7

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    Well written poem. I especially liked this part:

    "I feel the pressure mounting and strain to bring it down.
    All hope and fears within by being lies.
    Knowing that what I feel is only half of his."

    Thanks for entry.


  • Mistress Masquerade
    July 7, 2008

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    I understand this struggle, and know the hardships. It was beautifully written and showed deep emotion. Thank you for entering my contest, and thank you for enetring.

  • HeavensDaughter
    July 4, 2008

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    You really express well the struggle of watching someone who is dying...of being torn between what to pray for and wish for.

    Keep writing!


  • enitsirhC
    June 21, 2008

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    This piece is so beautiful.
    You have such a wonderful way of translating your feelings into words.

    Good luck in your contest.

  • APoetViolinist
    June 21, 2008

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    Beautiful

    Watching someone die slowly is so agonizingly painful, and this really captures how it feels. This is an amazing piece, thank you for entering.

  • X-xElectrax-X
    June 6, 2008
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    this is really a good write your feelings and emotions.good luck!

  • Ambrea
    June 3, 2008

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    Awww this touches me personally. I recently lost my Grandmother. It brings much stress and agony when the prayer of release becomes stronger. Its the hardest thing to accept. good luck!

  • stavykm gold member
    June 2, 2008

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    Excellent

    What a powerful poem. So filled with emotions and feeling during the most stressful of times in life and living. I so understand this poem and you did such a fabulous job expressing how one feels in this kind of situation. I'm currently in this situation myself. God bless you for this is a poem all should read. For sometime in our life's we all seem to come to this fork in the road of our life's journeys. Wonderful poet you are. Thank you for sharing.
    Many Blessings
    Kelle Marie
    stavykm

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