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Traitor

Now I know how Judas felt
The night he kissed goodbye
Brutal, lonely, in despair
No reason left to try

My focus may have been the cause
Of the various things I've done
Because I saw no end in sight
Evil came-and won

I cant go back, and I cant change
If I could, I would
Can I still say sorry now
Can I be understood?

Just one look, my mind was off
To worlds of lustful thoughts




to be finished as soon as i can get back on...

I want imagery again....kinda...help?

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  • brightsmylesxx
    June 1, 2008

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    This is very good! Unlike some of your other poems, the rhyme isn't as forced and it flows better. You should finish this it is a very good start!

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