Through gods eyes
Why are my people on the path of disruption
They lead day by day to terrior and curruption
Days of sadness day of drugs
Little kids following the men in there familys becoming little thugs
Why do you not listen to the commandments that I had to carve
You get so greedy and let millions of people starve
Fathers being on faithful with three kids they walk out the door
Over four thousand people dieing in a war
This world worse day by day year by year
To see this through my eyes makes me shead a tear
I want to see this world perfect
I want to hear the devils crys
That's the only thing I wish to see through my two eyes
Author notes
13 years old option 7 not hard at all to remember sorry I had to rhyme it it just came out that way I went with the flow hope you like it=)
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Comments
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I love the rhyme!(Of course you know that)This once again had a nice flow to it!It had good points and i absolutely loved the last line "That's the only thing I wish to see through my two eyes"BRAVO!
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well I dont really like the refrences to the christian god because I am buddhist but I do respect your religion. the rhyming did really throw me off but your explanation at the end softened me too it. This is all right for someone of your age. shows good thoughts. I feel you have potential to grow. This piece is not particularly great but its a good beginner write.
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