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When I Leave




I am a man of little worth,
of little note, of no degree,
and leave no wake behind.

But I have written from the heart
and poured my soul upon the page
so other little men, as I,
could taste a bit of wit and wisdom
never taught by learned men.

When I leave, and all must leave,
I know that deep inside me dwells
a knowing heart, satisfied
That time could never
pass me by.


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  • Rose Angel gold member
    April 19

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    Friend, you leave an imprint on the page with a sad feeling for the reader, of longing that you not leave...You have penned this in beautiful flow and rhyme, as some other masters of poetry history have....A treasured write!


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 24, 2008

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    Such a humble approach here which I found very endearing – I can see that you do write from the heart – and that is all that matters, isn’t it? It reminds me of what a well-known poet once said about “writing from the pulse”.

    I liked the sincerity of voice here; the looking forward to what was left behind – and what better than a “knowing heart”. Thank you for this entry.

    ~ Nicolette

  • Godwin
    June 3, 2008

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    Humility at its best!Classic writers just like everyone else would leave but like classic works they live on the minds of those they'd impacted on.


  • Robin Candor
    June 2, 2008

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    Hello, old friend. You have penned the words of a tried heart and a weary soul. Who knows why the soul si weary to me in this. perhaps it is because I believe you have seen a lot of life and know the outcome for the those that follow. You say that there is little wake, I don't belive that. There is a wave that anyone could ride on your words to a beach somewhere if they will only see the wave coming and position the board of their dreams appropriatly to catch it. Wonderful write and I wish I could have written it. There is no higher compliment last time I checked. RC


  • secberm
    June 2, 2008

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    As always, my friend, this is a work of art. Simply wonderful. Missed your writes. Good luck and write on.

    Dez


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    June 1, 2008
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    OH, I do like this very much. There is a humbling within your verse that brings us home.


  • luna-midnight gold member
    June 1, 2008

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    awwwww this is great. a very different take on the prompt, and still very meaningful and enjoyable to read.
    good luck and take care
    stephanie

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