I didn't realize
how heavy my heart was
until it was too crowded
it couldn't beat anymore
I had to open its' door
and spill all hard feelings
but people didn't like it
so what can I do?
I had to do so
to be able to love you
I want to dedicate my heart to thee
and set myself free
this heart's strong
now it can only love
no more hard feelings to be
this heart's no longer heavy
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Beautiful Mosaic of Options by Winterbirdie.
600 points, ended June 5, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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interesting,
nice to see you entering contests..
good job and keep on writing,
i love your choice of colours and the background fits the poem perfectly,
Nooni
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Good idea in your poem! It would have been a lot clearer if the beat of the poem was more uniform. Also, forced rhyming is the best. I can't rhyme so I stay away from it as much as possible =). I like the line, "I want to dedicate my heart to thee". Good luck in the contest. =D
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Hi!
There! You go by the grace of God
That’s great!
Now your mind is the guide. Mash-Allah
Dear Jazm! You have to love yourself before anyone will.
Sometime, loving somebody doesn’t give the result as you expect. A broken heart needs time to heal and heart that longs for love to return may confuse things.
Having a dream is a wish that a heart makes in secret when no one is there to control it. People say, a heart without love is just a half heart. We all need somebody to talk to. I hope your heart finds what you are looking for.
Well written and lucid!
I WISH YOU ALL THE BEST MY FRIEND
Take care!
Scarzat
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Nice
"I had to do so
to be able to love you"
what a wonderful justification. the flow is nice but the subject is very nice.
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