Sages of old say that love is blind,
But I think I disagree:
For, my dear, I think it's near sighted
And can't see past your vanity.
Seems nothing I do is good enough
And yet by me you stay.
And your moods? Don't get me started ~
Which girlfriend do I have today?
My artistic lifestyle has no set path,
And my free spirt attracted you.
But I can't always afford your luxuries ~
I do what I can to make do.
Are you really here because you love me
Or am I a debutante's toy?
Am I here for your entertainment,
Solely to bring you joy?
You're a high-maintenance woman, love,
Out of my league, no doubt
Our love is like luke-warm water
Baby, just spit me out
Author notes
Prompt:
Collective Soul
"December"
"Why follow me to higher ground?
Lost as you swear I am.
Don't throw away your basic needs,
Ambiance and vanity"
Some of my own life is in this write, but not now!
A contest entry
- Lyrics Everywhere by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended June 15, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Cheer me up Prewrites and multiple entries allowed by crazymomma.
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Comments
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the last stanza is a bomb! the entire concept is great and the poem entertaining. Reminds me of the difference between an orchid and a cactus. The orchid needs constant attention and care while the cactus can survive with little. Alas, I find myself an orchid.
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LOOOOOOOOOVE this! 'near sighted and can't see past your vanity' filled sage knowledge yourself it seems. The ending was interesting and not at all what I was expecting. Very well done!
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This was very creative and interesting. It was kind of sad though. Thanks for entering
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i had to chuckle as i read this. i think it would make a wonderful country song. great job. viyanna rosemarie
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I agree that picture is awesome. Great poem also.
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Thank you! It was fun to write, and that pic was too good to pass up!
lol
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I love this picture.
Hah. This was very good,
like other people said
it was plain beautiful
minus the plain.
Good work
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Thank you ~ I thought the pic was perfect, I laughed when I came across it.
As always, your comments are greatly appreciated, my friend!
~Tim
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beautiful love, jsut plain beautiful...
thank you for sharing!
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Thank you for saying "Beautiful" & the applause! Much appreciated.
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BAM!
That was the sound of how this poem began & ended.
Sages of old say that love is blind
But I think I disagree:
For, my dear, I think it's near-sighted
And can't see past your vanity.
You're a high-maintenance woman, love,
Out of my league, no doubt
Our love is like luke-warm water
Baby, just spit me out
That's just marvelous.
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Thanks Jaime~
"BAM!
That was the sound of how this poem began & ended."
~ love that! lol Ever watch Emeril Live?
Glad you enjoyed it, this was a fun write.
~Tim
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'm tired of being what you want me to be
Feeling so faithless lost under the surface
Don't know what you're expecting of me
Put under the pressure of walking in your shoes
Numb by Lincoln Park
If that does not inspire contact me -
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Thank you for the Collective Soul prompt!
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