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The Clocks' Song

Delicacy danced on roof tops
     releasing echoes

   of once upon dreams;

 

as these memoirs
    recite clinged brace,

          that lovers' touch

             once awoke.

Their dew is silenced

        with deepened meanings

     lost on tongues;

 

that picture perfect framing
       held within times' grasp.

Horizons beckoned

        dawns' break
as flowers falter skin;
         we kiss
              we remember

 

that life is held in the hands
  of beauty's grandfather clock,

                     eternally.

 

As living is spun

in the threads

    of his face;

 

we wonder in his presence.

Author notes

Rules:
- Free verse only
- 75 to 90 words max.
- Left align & plain background
prompt: time

clinged would appear not to be spelled right, but it is the word i wanted, if you catch it's own meaning. =]

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  • Nicolette gold member
    June 24, 2008

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    I had to read this poem a few times as I think your punctuation and the use of words such as “as” and “that” somehow influences the flow and logic of the poem. But having said that, I’ve found in the poem some really nice images and metaphors and I liked the personification of a clock here and the way it links with life, skin, beauty and other human characteristics.

    The opening lines are very good, as well as the 2nd last stanza – I think that was my favourite part, the “spun in threads of his face”. This poem has a lot of potential and your use of language and imagery is good. Thank you for this entry.

    ~ Nicolette


  • nilav
    June 8, 2008
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    you weave magic with words....lovely


  • Weltt
    June 4, 2008

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    First poem I read since being outta town for a week and I loved it! Second to last stanza was awesome. great job and best of luck in the contest!


  • buffsab99
    June 1, 2008

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    Excellent

    that life is held in the hands
    of beauty's grandfather clock,

    eternally.

    I love this part as well as the whole write. Amazing job


  • stasis
    June 1, 2008

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    this paints such a beautiful picture. such a great way to describe time and the way that it works and can almost be manipulated by those experiencing it. relativity at its best. wonderful piece, good luck in the contest!


  • Hoosierpoet silver member
    June 1, 2008

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    A fascinating way of describing "time" - and the significance of the grandfather clock. My parents had an old wind-up clock on the mantle that chimed every 15 minutes, and struck the hour on every hour (1 strike for 1 Oclock, 2 for 2 Oclock, etc. so you could tell the time during the night without looking at the clock. You would think it would wake you at night but you can easily get used to it.

    Moses


  • Lil-Bit Crazy
    June 1, 2008

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    what a lovely write you have penned here... wow just simply amazing love it... thanks for sharing this and goood luck in the contest!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • Seaquince
    June 1, 2008

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    you have a lovely way with words.... reading your work falls softly off the tongue... you write well

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