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would you...?

eyes meeting,
for a second the world seems to disappear,
Smiles, mirrors of each others faces,
so pure,
A childlike inocence that they are scared to break,
They're growing up, finding, learning.

Drifting apart,
Forgetting the smiles,
forgetting how to love,
how to feel emotions,
Only anger pulses through them,
As they see the world for what it is,
They forget the inocent ones,
They forget themselves.

Out of the corner of an eye,
She sees him,
But she does not react,
Until all her feelings burn inside her,
Pulsing through her blood,
And she knows it now.

Walking towards him, she says,
Would you...?

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  • Amaranthine Lover silver member
    July 1
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    very smooth in its understanding

  • dying-emotions
    June 24

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    Good write!

    I really like the ending gives the poem a good edge...

    Thanks for entering.

    Good luck in the contest

  • crazymomma
    June 7

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    I love how the ending is left open. Very nice imagery and story here. Thanks for entering and good luck to you

  • CarnalNineTailedFox
    June 1

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    this is very mysterious! i am feeling this one! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox

  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    June 1

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    truely an emotiuonal write bringing the depth of love around the each word here..thanks for sharing it...well done..
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